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14．假如你是李华，你的朋友Linda最近很心烦，因为父母对她要求很严格，整天让她学习禁止她做一些她想做的事情，比如上网、和朋友玩等．请你给她写封信，进行心理疏导并提出一些建议．应包括以下两个要点：
1．简述自己类似的经历；
2．提出至少两条建议．
注意：词数100个左右，开头与结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数．
Dear Linda，
I can understand how you feel．When I was young，                                      

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息你的朋友Linda最近很心烦，因为父母对她要求很严格，整天让她学习禁止她做一些她想做的事情，比如上网、和朋友玩等．请你给她写封信，进行心理疏导并提出一些建议．写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：简述自己类似的经历；提出至少两条建议． 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：heart to heart心贴心地；communicate with 与…沟通；even though即使；By the way顺便说一下；is of some help有帮助的；
But after I talked to my parents heart to heart，we had a better understanding of each other．（高分句型一）
So try to communicate with your parents to let them know that you are wise enough to manage your own business well．（高分句型二）
By the way，it's understandable that your parents ask you to put your studies in the first place．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Linda，
       I can understand how you feel．When I was young，I had the same experience as you do．But after I talked to my parents heart to heart，we had a better understanding of each other．（高分句型一）So try to communicate with your parents to let them know that you are wise enough to manage your own business well．（高分句型二）To understand them better，you should always put yourself in their position．Don't you think that all parents in the world love their children even though they are sometimes strict and serious？If you can spend your time and money wisely，I am sure that your parents will trust you and you will enjoy more freedom．
       By the way，it's understandable that your parents ask you to put your studies in the first place．（高分句型三）
       I hope my advice is of some help to you．
                                                                                                                                                                                                       Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                        Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．