Question

10．假定你是李华，在"五一劳动节"期间，你参加了美心旅行社举办的"美丽西藏行""打包旅行"活动，活动之后，你对这次活动非常不满，理由如下：
要点如下：
▲．行途中的食物很差；
▲工作人员的服务态度不好；
▲．住宿条件差，不安全；
▲．购物的时间和场所安排的较多．
请就此事给美心旅行社的经理写一封投诉信．
注意：
1．词数100左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3．参考词汇：
五一劳动节 May Day； 打包旅行 package tour；  美丽西藏行 A eautiful travel to Tibet；
美心旅行社 Pleasant Travel Agency； 投诉．抱怨 complain （about）…
4．信的开头和结尾已为你写好，但不计入词数．
Dear Manager，
My name is Li Hua．I am a passenger of your travel agency．
I'm writing to complain about the package tour--A beautiful travel to Tibet to Yunnan organized by your travel agency-Pleasant Travel Agency on May Day．（高分句型一）
Firstly，the food on the trip was terrible and we even couldn't have enough to eat．Secondly，I think that the guide from your agency was unfriendly and impolite to us．Besides，o our disappointment，we were arranged to stay in a poorly equipped hotel with no hot water supply．Lastly，we were forced to stay in so many shops for so long to buy unnecessary goods．（高分句型二）We were really tired of it．
I will appreciate it if you can take our complaints seriously and make every effort to improve your service in the future．（高分句型三）
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假定你是李华，在"五一劳动节"期间，你参加了美心旅行社举办的"美丽西藏行""打包旅行"活动，活动之后，你对这次活动非常不满，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：▲．行途中的食物很差；▲工作人员的服务态度不好；▲．住宿条件差，不安全；▲．购物的时间和场所安排的较多．请就此事给美心旅行社的经理写一封投诉信2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：complain about抱怨，投诉；Firstly首先；Secondly其次；Besides另外；Lastly，最后；be tired of厌倦，厌烦；take…seriously 认真对待；
I'm writing to complain about the  package tour--A beautiful travel to Tibet to Yunnan organized by your travel agency-Pleasant Travel Agency on May Day．（高分句型一）
Lastly，we were forced to stay in so many shops for so long to buy unnecessary goods．（高分句型二）
I will appreciate it if you can take our complaints seriously and make every effort to improve your service in the future．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Manager，
       My name is Li Hua．I am a passenger of your travel agency．I'm writing to complain about the  package tour--A beautiful travel to Tibet to Yunnan organized by your travel agency-Pleasant Travel Agency on May Day．（高分句型一）
       Firstly，the food on the trip was terrible and we even couldn't have enough to eat．Secondly，I think that the guide from your agency was unfriendly and impolite to us．Besides，o our disappointment，we were arranged to stay in a poorly equipped hotel with no hot water supply．Lastly，we were forced to stay in so many shops for so long to buy unnecessary goods．（高分句型二）We were really tired of it．
       I will appreciate it if you can take our complaints seriously and make every effort to improve your service in the future．（高分句型三）
                                                                                                                              Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                                               Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．