Question

【题目】请根据下面的英文短诗，展开适当的想象，写一篇标题为“My Teacher Mr. Moore的短文。

There’s a teacher Mr. .Moore.

Who is lovely and thirty-four.

Always encouraging us to try.

He leads us to a world of “why”.

We all admire him more and more.

注意： 1. 不得照抄短诗原文。

2. 必须结合短诗的内容，发挥想象，适当展开。

3.必须突出短诗的主题，结构完整，语意连贯。

4. 短文不能写成诗歌形式。

5. 词数：120左右。

My Teacher Mr. Moore

Answer 1

【答案】

My Teacher Mr Moore

Of all my teachers, Mr. Moore is the one who impresses me most., Though he is 34,he looks very young for her age. And he’s one of the most popular teachers in our school.

Compared with other teachers ,Mr. Moore pays more attention to his way of teaching .He tries various ways to make his classes lively and interesting .In his opinion, we should not only know “what”, but also understand “why”. So ,instead of giving us answers immediately ,he encourages us to think by ourselves whenever he puts forward questions. With his help. we’ve learned how to analyze and settle problem. What a wonderful world of “why” he leads us to!

He is such a learned person that we all admire him very much.

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇半开放式的作文，考生在写作时要注意短诗的重心，切忌偏题，诗主要是对这个老师进行了描述，考生要紧紧抓住这些特点，适当展开自己的想象，结合生活学习中老师的特点。在写作的过程中注意句型的多样化和连接词的使用。要求考生用地道的英语表达自己的观点，要求观点明确，驾驭语言的能力强，选择词汇的时候要选择相对高级的词汇，也要运用多种句型，让文章更有变化。难度在于选择合适的词汇和句型表达文章需要的意思，可以变换使用一些容易驾驭的句子或者词汇实现同样的目的。在写作的时候要运用合适的连接词把要点串联起来，使文章成为一个整体。

【亮点说明】：范文主要分为第二段和第三段结尾段，第一段总体介绍，第二段详细介绍，第三段做好总结。

范文使用了非谓语 ：Compared with other teachers ,Mr. Moore pays more attention to his way of teaching.；时间状语从句：he encourages us to think by ourselves whenever he puts forward questions；感叹句What a wonderful world of “why” he leads us to!结果状语从句He is such a learned person that we all admire him very much.等重难点语法知识，英语知识掌握得很扎实；范文注意使用In my opinion, instead of , With his help等词和短语来衔接前后句和上下文，使作文衔接紧凑，条理清晰；范文还使用了pay attention to ；make his class lively and interesting ；not only..., but also...encourage sb to do sth; immediately 等高级词汇和固定短语，使作文的内容得到了充实。