Question

10．最近，李越被评为你们班的"每周之星"．请你根据她的事迹（在上周六下午，不顾天气炎热，为班级选购歌咏比赛服装），用英语为班级板报写一篇l00一120个词的短文．你的文章应包括下列要点：
    1．李越的事迹及其对同学的影响；        2．你的评论．
    注意：1．文章的标题和开头已给出（不计词数）．
         2．参考词汇：singing contest 歌咏比赛
Costume   服装
Star Student of the Week
Li Yue has been awarded the title of"Star Student of the Week"for what she did for our class．On the hot afternoon of last Saturday，Li Yue went downtown and walked from one store to another，looking for the costumes we would wear in the singing contest． While the rest of us were enjoying our leisure time in cool and comfortable rooms，she spent the whole afternoon searching and selecting．Finally，she found the right clothes．Deeply moved by her efforts，we tried our best and won the first prize in the contest．
Li Yue is always warm-hearted and cares a lot about the class．Besides，she often devotes her spare time to helping others．She has set a good example for us．Therefore，she deserves the honor and we should learn from her．．

Answer 1

分析 本作文为应用文，根据所给要点内容为班级"每周之星"李越写一篇人物事迹，属于提纲作文．时态为一般过去时和一般现在时．人称以第三人称为主．重要短语：award the title of…（授予…称号），devote…to…（致力于），spend time in doing （花时间做…），try one's best…（努力做），warm-hearted（热心肠的），cares about （关心），set a good example for（为…树立榜样）．

解答 Star Student of the Week
      Li Yue has been awarded the title of"Star Student of the Week"for what she did for our class．On the hot afternoon of last Saturday，Li Yue went downtown and walked from one store to another，looking for the costumes we would wear in the singing contest．【高分句型】While the rest of us were enjoying our leisure time in cool and comfortable rooms，she spent the whole afternoon searching and selecting．Finally，she found the right clothes．Deeply moved by her efforts，we tried our best and won the first prize in the contest．【高分句型】（李越的事迹及其对同学的影响）
      Li Yue is always warm-hearted and cares a lot about the class．Besides，she often devotes her spare time to helping others．She has set a good example for us．Therefore，she deserves the honor and we should learn from her．（你的评论）

点评 写好提纲式作文的关键是认真审题和分析所给的提纲，并以此为基础充分发挥自己的想象力，灵活运用英语知识，采用不同的表达方式将各要点完整地表述出来，注意主次分明，详略得当．语言力求准确、简洁．根据情景的发展，按顺序安排好材料．同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，使文章具有一定的连贯性．最后必须认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等．