假定你是李华.目前在英国某中学做交换生．学校公告栏上一则出售二手笔记本电脑的广告引起了你的兴趣．FOR SALELenovo Yoga 300 laptop in excellent condition4GB RAM and 64GB hard drivePrice:£155Contact Heck at jheck@aef．com请用英语写一封电子邮件.咨询有� 题目和参考答案——青夏教育精英家教网—

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15．假定你是李华，目前在英国某中学做交换生．学校公告栏上一则出售二手笔记本电脑的广告引起了你的兴趣．

FOR SALE
Lenovo Yoga 300 laptop in excellent condition
4GB RAM and 64GB hard drive
Price：£155
Contact Heck at jheck@aef．com

请用英语写一封电子邮件，咨询有关电脑的详情．内容主要包括：
1．表明写作意图；
2．询问相关信息：是否有原始购机发票（invoice），是否维修过，如何付款．
注意：1．词数100左右
2．可以适当增加细节，已使行文连贯；
3．开头和结尾已给出，但不计入总次数．
Dear Heck，
I am writing for more information about the laptop advertised on the school bulletin board．I would appreciate it if you could be kind enough to answering the following question．（高分句型一）First of all，do you still have the original invoice for the laptop？Secondly，I would like to know whether the laptop has any problems．Have you ever had it repaired？Lastly，where and how can we conclude a deal if both of us agree to one？By the way，would it be possible to give me a 10% discount considering the storage of the laptop is rather small．（高分句型二）
I am looking forward to your reply
Yours，
Li Hua．

分析本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息在英国某中学做交换生．学校公告栏上一则出售二手笔记本电脑的广告引起了你的兴趣，用英语写一封电子邮件，咨询有关电脑的详情写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：表明写作意图；询问相关信息：是否有原始购机发票（invoice），是否维修过，如何付款．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：First of all首先；Secondly其次；Lastly最后；By the way顺便说一下；considering考虑到；look forward to盼望
I would appreciate it if you could be kind enough to answering the following question．（高分句型一）
By the way，would it be possible to give me a 10% discount considering the storage of the laptop is rather small．（高分句型二）

解答 Dear Heck，
      I am writing for more information about the laptop advertised on the school bulletin board．I would appreciate it if you could be kind enough to answering the following question．（高分句型一）First of all，do you still have the original invoice for the laptop？Secondly，I would like to know whether the laptop has any problems．Have you ever had it repaired？Lastly，where and how can we conclude a deal if both of us agree to one？By the way，would it be possible to give me a 10% discount considering the storage of the laptop is rather small．（高分句型二）
      I am looking forward to your reply．

Yours，
Li Hua

点评英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．