Question

【题目】假设你是高一学生李华。你的英国朋友Jim在给你的邮件中提到他对中国儒家文化很感兴趣，并请你介绍有关历史人物孔子(Confucius)。请你给Jim回信，介绍孔子，内容包括：

1. 基本情况。

2. 主要主张：仁，义，序。

3. 重要影响。

注意：

1. 词数100左右；文中不能透露真实姓名及学校。

2. 开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

3. 可适当增加细节使行文连贯。

Dear Jim,

It’s great to hear from you. I feel proud knowing your interest in school of Ju in the ancient Chinese history.

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Yours

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Jim,

It’s great to hear from you. I feel proud knowing your interest in school of Ju in the ancient Chinese history.

As for Confucius, he is also my favorite figure in the ancient Chinese history. He was a Chinese thinker and social philosopher, who lived in the ancient China where states were often at war with each other. His teachings and philosophy have deeply influenced many Asian countries.

He stressed the importance of kindness, duty and order in society.

We Chinese are greatly influenced by his teachings. In fact, one of his sentences impressed me a lot. He said we should treat others the way we want to be treated. He inspires me to always be kind and polite，because that’s how I would like to be treated.

Interested in knowing more? I can even find you some books! Just let me know.

Yours

Li Hua

【解析】这是一篇提纲类作文，文章要点已经给出，在写这篇文章时要注意以下几点：

1.整篇文章时态以一般现在时为主。

2.要点要齐全，但是不要进行简单的罗列，可以采用适当的连接词，或者是表递进关系的副词如As for Confucius,使上下文衔接自然，行文自然流畅。

3.注意语气，此文是写介绍信的英语短文，所以语气上应该比较诚恳，不应该出现过多的强硬语气的词语。

4.此作文要分四个部分写，每个部分要更完整，最好用简单句与复合句结合的方法写作如He was a Chinese thinker and social philosopher, who lived in the ancient China where states were often at war with each other.

5.多采用一些高级句型，如It’s great to hear from you. He said we should treat others the way we want to be treated. He inspires me to always be kind and polite，because that’s how I would like to be treated.同时使用一些词组如As for， each other，In fact,inspire to 等。

【范文亮点】

提纲性文章难点：提纲性文章难点：扩充成句，因为提纲性文章主题内容已经基本列出，在将短句扩充时，要精炼。其中要注意尽量用高级词汇和复杂句是来表达，如强调句，定语从句等，就如文中He was a Chinese thinker and social philosopher, who lived in the ancient China where states were often at war with each other.使用的是定语从句。再者就是要多使用一些高级词汇与词组，如As for， each other，In fact,inspire to 等。最后就是要段落清新，层次分明。就像文中要多使用一些连接词语使衔接自然。