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9．下面的柱状图（bar chart）显示了你校上周针对"用电脑，手机和纸媒学习"的调查结果．请你用英语给21st Century报社写一篇短文，报道你校的调查结果，并对此结果发表你的看法．注意：词数100左右．

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分析 本篇书面表达属于图表类作文，根据提示信息 下面的柱状图（bar chart）显示了你校上周针对"用电脑，手机和纸媒学习"的调查结果．请你用英语给21st Century报社写一篇短文，报道你校的调查结果，并对此结果发表你的看法．写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息    2、图表是文章的总体框架，要在图表的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：get used to doing习惯于；prefer to 更喜欢；account for占；Apparently明显的；As far as I am concerned以我的观点来看；
As is demonstrated in the bar chart，using papers to study occupies 47%，followed by the  percentage of 38% students in my school，who get used to using all the three means of study.11% of the students surveyed prefer to use computers．（高分句型一）
Computers or phones usage is supposed to do harm to eyesight，which is the reason why a small number of students choose．（高分句型二）
As far as I am concerned，if used properly，all these means of study can benefit us．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Editor，
       We made a survey in our school last week and I'd like to tell you something about the results．
       As is demonstrated in the bar chart，using papers to study occupies 47%，followed by the  percentage of 38% students in my school，who get used to using all the three means of study.11% of the students surveyed prefer to use computers．（高分句型一）Students who think smartphones can help their study account for the rest of 4%．
       Apparently，the traditional way of study students read books and take notes in pen is still the choice by most students．Computers or phones usage is supposed to do harm to eyesight，which is the reason why a small number of students choose．（高分句型二）As far as I am concerned，if used properly，all these means of study can benefit us．（高分句型三）

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．