Question

13．A young ensign （海军少尉） was given the opportunity to prepare his ship to"set sail"．Soon the ship was driven slowly out of the channel．The ensign's efficiency was remarkable．In fact，the talk was that he had set a new record for getting the ship underway．Later he was handed a radio message from the captain．
"My personal congratulations on completing the sail with amazing speed，"it read，"but next time wait until your captain goes aboard before getting underway!"
   What good is a ship without the captain？The ensign did all the right things，but he never did the most important thing!
   It is a matter of priorities （优先）．You may accomplish a great deal every day．But are you accomplishing the truly important things？Have you put first things first？
   In work and study，in the areas of mental，physical and spiritual health，are you truly doing the important things？
   Today，will you put first things first？And how about tomorrow？And the next day？If so，you will one day discover that you are building a life that counts．
【写作内容】
以 Put first things first为题，写一篇读后感．
1．以约30个词概括所读文章的内容；
2．以约120个词表达你对该主题的见解，并包括如下要点：
 （1）对该主题发表你的看法；
 （2）以你自己或他人成长的经历说明你的感受．
【写作要求】
1．作文中可以使用自己的亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容但不得直接引用原文中的句子
2．文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称．
【评分标准】概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯．

Answer 1

分析 本文是读写任务型写作，这类作文可按照三段式模板写：第一段：概况所给短文要点．第二段：过渡词引出主题句---阐述理由．第三段：个人观点．特别要注意第一段的概括．用自己的语言概括，不能照搬照抄原文． 时态用一般现在时．人称用第一和第三人称． 重要短语：be misapprehended by（被误解），a matter of priorities（优先考虑的问题），leave sth behind（落下某事），exert great influence on（对某事产生影响），of one's own accord（自动的，自愿的），cease to do （停止做某事），upside down（颠倒的，倒置的），with the cart before the horse（本末倒置），illustrate the significance of（阐述…的重要性），give priority to（优先考虑），be familiar with（熟悉某事），deal with（处理，对付，应付），result in（导致），keep sth in mind（把…记在脑子里）．
【高分句型一】
1．①Putting first things first is a matter of priorities，②which was misapprehended by an ensign③who prepared the sailing with remarkable efficiency but left behind the most important thing of having a captain．
①此处是动名词"Putting first things first"作主语，主句为"is"，表语为"a matter of priorities"．
②此处是由关系代词"which"引导的非限制性定语从句，主句为"Putting first things first is a matter of priorities"．
③此处是由关系代词"who"引导的定语从句，先行词为"an ensign"．
【高分句型二】
2．Whether people put first things first exerts great influence on the process of pushing things forward and even decides the future development．
此处是由连接词"Whether"引导的主语从句，主句为"Whether people put first things first"，谓语是由"and"连接的"exerts great influence on"和"decides"，宾语为"the process of pushing things forward"和"the future development"．
【高分句型三】
3．In the examination for high school，I should have got tens of more marks if I had given priority to the questions I was familiar with．
此处是由虚拟语气用在条件状语从句中，if从句中结构为"had+过去分词"，主句结构为"should have done"，是与过去事实相反．
【高分句型四】
4．I can not explain①why I was so stubborn at that time and was quite illogical ②when dealing with an important examination，③which directly resulted in many questions unfinished，and of course resulted in my failure to enter a key high school．
①此处是由连接副词"why"引导的宾语从句，主句为"I can not explain"．
②此处是由"when"引导的时间状语从句，从句中用了省略，结构为"when+现在分词"，可以理解为"when I delt with an important examination"．
③此处是由关系代词"which"引导的非限制性定语从句，主句为"I can not explain why I was so stubborn at that time and was quite illogical when dealing with an important examination"．

解答 Putting first things first is a matter of priorities，which was misapprehended by an ensign who prepared the sailing with remarkable efficiency but left behind the most important thing of having a captain．【高分句型一】（概括）
        Whether people put first things first exerts great influence on the process of pushing things forward and even decides the future development．【高分句型二】Things invariably go of their own accord．If the order is misplaced，the whole process is blocked and ceases to be an abstract concept．Therefore，we can hardly imagine how we achieve future development with things upside down，with the cart before the horse．（看法）
       My experience vividly illustrates the significance of putting first things first．In the examination for high school，I should have got tens of more marks if I had given priority to the questions I was familiar with．【高分句型三】I can not explain why I was so stubborn at that time and was quite illogical when dealing with an important examination，which directly resulted in many questions unfinished，and of course resulted in my failure to enter a key high school．【高分句型四】（以自己成长的经历说明感受）
       I always keep this lesson in mind and promise myself to put first things first this time for the coming NMET examination．（个人观点）

点评 读写任务型写作是将阅读与写作有机结合，要求考生既能读懂文章信息，又要依据要求规范连贯地表达内容，其中准确概括很有挑战且十分重要，根据记叙文、议论文、说明文等不同文体作相应概括，总的来说，遵循以下步骤：确定主题句；寻找关键词；重构主题句；重组支持句．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．