题目内容
【题目】假设你是红星中学高三(1)班学生李华。最近你和同学组织了“文明使用共享单车”的活动,请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序,给校刊“英语角”写一篇稿件介绍你们的活动过程。注意:词数不少于60。
提示词:1.civilized 文明的
2. leaflets 宣传单
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【答案】Recently, the increasing popularity of shared bikes has made our lives more convenient. However, my classmates and I often noticed some shared bikes placed messily everywhere. We felt upset and decided to make a change to the uncivilized behavior.
First, we had a heated discussion about the problem at our class meeting. We shared our ideas and came up with a great plan. After making full preparations, we started to take action.
On Saturday morning, we gathered outside the subway station near our school. Firstly, we began with those messy shared bikes there and tried to put them in order. People passing by all appreciated what we did. Seeing the bikes in rows on the pavement, we really felt excited. Then, in order to encourage people’s civilized behavior, we put up a poster saying “PLEASE BE CIVILIZED WHILE USING A SHARED BIKE”. Meanwhile, some of us helped to give out leaflets. Of course, we drew much attention from the passers-by. Hopefully our action would make a difference.
This experience actually inspires me a lot. The idea of sharing requires people’s awareness of civilization. When the uncivilized behavior occurs, it is our duty to do our best to stop it. I strongly believe that in this way our society will become better and better
【解析】这是一篇命题作文。同学们在写这篇文章时,要注意以下几点:1.由于活动发生在过去,这篇稿件是为了介绍这项活动,所以通篇的主要时态为一般过去时。2.题目只给出了两个提示词。所以内容上的扩充需要学生根据图片详细介绍活动过程,根据四幅图酌情增添内容。在叙述过程中,可以使用适当的连接词,使上下文行文流畅。3.由于要求写的是一篇稿件,所以要注意文章的结构层次,写之前可列出一个提纲,活动原因—活动介绍—活动意义,再动笔写时大脑就清晰多了
【范文亮点】
1. However, my classmates and I often noticed some shared bikes placed messily everywhere.然而,我和我的同学们经常会注意到一些共享单车被到处凌乱地放置。(连接词however的使用不仅引起了读者注意,且使得前后句的转折关系得以自然承接;placed动词-ed形式作后置定语,修饰bikes)
2. . After making full preparations, we started to take action.在充分做好准备后,我们开始采取行动。(采用了make full preparations、take action可以加分的动词短语;采用了由after引导的时间状语从句)
3. Seeing the bikes in rows on the pavement, we really felt excited. Then, in order to encourage people’s civilized behavior, we put up a poster saying “PLEASE BE CIVILIZED WHILE USING A SHARED BIKE”.看到共享单车在人行道上排列整齐,我们很激动。然后为了鼓励人们的文明行为,我们张贴了一张海报,写着“请文明使用共享单车”(第一句使用了动词-ing形式作伴随状语,主语we与seeing是逻辑上的主动关系;第二句使用了动词-ing形式作后置定语,poster与saying是逻辑上的主动关系)