Question

【题目】假如你是眉山市某中学高三学生李华，你的美国笔友Bob来信介绍了他的家乡并希望了解你的家乡，请根据以下要点给他写封回信。

1.家乡所处的自然环境；2.家乡近年的发展变化；3.家乡发展中存在的问题；

4.对家乡未来发展的建议(两点)。

注意：1.词数120左右；2.开头语和结尾语已为你写好;

3.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯; 4.文中不能出现考生真实姓名和家乡名称。

Dear Bob,

I’m glad to receive your last letter telling me about your beautiful hometown.

I'm looking forward to your next letter.

Best wishes!

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Bob,

I’m glad to receive your last letter telling me about your beautiful hometown. Now I'd like to introduce my hometown to you.

Located on the Minjiang River, my hometown is very comfortable to live in with wonderful scenery and pleasant weather, which is attractive to visitors from all over the country. In recent years, many great changes have taken place. Its economy has been developing rapidly. Lots of roads, factories and houses have been built. Besides, more schools and hospitals are available for us people. We are living a happier life. However, there are still some problems, such as water and air pollution and heavy traffic during rush hours, which affect our life very badly.

In my opinion, my hometown should not only develop its economy scientifically but we must attach great importance to protecting the environment so that we'll have a better hometown in the future.（134 words）

I'm looking forward to your next letter.

Best wishes!

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：考查应用文中的书信的写作。请你以李华的名义给你的一位美国笔友Bob写一封回信，介绍一下自己的家乡。本篇习作要点都已经给出，书信类短文的关键在于要点要全面包括，不能有遗漏和省略。但是要点只是提纲，考生还要在此基础上增加细节，不要逐字逐句翻译，同时注意谋篇布局的顺序，运用合适的连接词连接全文，同时选择高级的词汇和语法项目让文章更有文采。描述要尽量选择简洁的语言，运用合适的语法规则和词汇把各要点都准确表述出。难点在于选择词汇和句型，可以灵活运用高级词汇和固定短语准确表述。除此之外，还要用适当的连接词把句子连接起来，这样文章会显得更连贯。

【亮点说明】本篇习作第二段的第一句写得非常好。使用了located on the Minjiang River这样的非谓语动词担当状语，同时又使用了非限制性定语从句which is attractive…，整句话既介绍了家乡的地理位置，又总结它的风景之美。最后一段第一句话使用了短语not only…but also连接了两个句子，同时又使用高级短语attach importance to，整个文章要点齐全，叙述简明又全面。