题目内容
【题目】假如你是黎明,上高中后,老师制止你们带智能手机(smartphone),理由是有碍学习,担心你迷恋上网。请你给老师写一封信,劝说他们同意你们上学带智能手机。
注意:1. 信中内容包括下面的所有内容;
2. 词数:100左右,画线部分不计入总词数;
3. 信的开都和结尾已经给出,但不计入总词数。
事由 :老师制止你们带智能手机,劝说他们同意你们日常生活中用智能手机
原因: 1. 有利于查找资料,下载微课(WeCourse)
2. 浏览新闻,了解信息;
3. 作为高中生,我们正在形成自己的判断能力
Dear teachers,
I ’m writing to persuade you to let us use the smartphone in our daily life .
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Looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Li Ming
【答案】
Dear teachers,
I’m writing to persuade you to let us use the smartphone in our daily life. We know you’re afraid that we may be addicted to phone games, which will affect our study. Actually, every coin has its two sides. We still think that using the smartphone can bring us much more advantages.
First of all, I think it would be better if we can use the smartphone because not only can we go through a wide range of learning resources on the Internet but also we can download the WeCourses provided by our school. Furthermore, we can broaden our horizons by reading various news online. Last but not least, as high school students, we are building up our sense of judgment. Given chances, we are sure that we will learn how to use the smart phone effectively.
I do hope you can take my suggestion into consideration and make a final decision. Looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Li Ming
【解析】
试题分析:本次作文要求黎明给老师写一封信,劝说他们同意学生上学带智能手机。要点包括:1.有利于查找资料,下载微课;2.浏览新闻,了解信息;3.作为高中生,我们正在形成自己的判断能力。故既要完成任务,又要兼顾形式的要求。
写作亮点:本篇条理清楚,要点全面,结构连贯。其句式上的变化既使得文章生动而流畅,也体现了作者驾驭句式的能力。例如:文章运用了宾语从句that we may be addicted to phone games.that using the smartphone can bring us much more advantages.和that we will learn how to use the smart phone effectively.定语从句which will affect our study. build up, effectively, broaden our horizons take my suggestion into consideration, make a final decision , looking forward to等词汇及first of all, furthermore, last but not least等连接词。