Question

14．假如你（李华）的网友John即将外出旅行，请你根据以下提示，用英语给他写封电子邮件，向他介绍你对旅游的看法并提醒他旅行注意事项．
1、旅游是一种非常好的活动．当你累了或有空的时候，到外地走走．欣赏美 景，呼吸新鲜空气，交朋友，放松身心，有益健康．
2、旅行前的准备．了解天气，带好衣服、相机、常用药品等．
3、旅行时注意饮食卫生和安全，防止小偷．
要求：1、行文连贯，不得逐句翻译；2、词数：120词左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数．

Answer 1

分析 本题是提纲类写作，根据材料提示写一封电子邮件，向John介绍你对旅游的看法并提示他旅行注意事项，写作要点包括：1、旅游是一种非常好的活动．当你累了或有空的时候，到外地走走．欣赏美 景，呼吸新鲜空气，交朋友，放松身心，有益健康．2、旅行前的准备．了解天气，带好衣服、相机、常用药品等．3、旅行时注意饮食卫生和安全，防止小偷．写作时以第一人称为主，以一般现在时为主要时态．
重点词汇：share…with…（与…分享）；In my opinion（以我看来，我的观点是）； get tired of （厌烦，厌倦）；make friends with （与…交朋友）；ahead of time（提前）；and so on（等等）； pay attention to （注意）
高分句型：1．Only by relaxing yourself will you forget your tiredness and build up your health．
副词only置于句首时，句子用倒装，故情态动词will位于主语you之前．
2．①Be careful with everything everywhere②in case your money gets stolen．
①此处用强调句型提出建议，增强了表达效果．②引导目的状语从句，意为以防免得．

解答 Dear John，
I'm glad to hearthat you are going to travel． Now I'd like to share my view on travelling with you．
In my opinion，travelling is a very good activity． When you get tired of your work or study and when you have free time，you can go out to enjoy the beauty of nature．You can breathe the fresh air，meet different people and make friends with them． Only by relaxing yourself will you forget your tiredness and build up your health（高分句型一）．
In order to have a pleasant journey，you need to make full preparations ahead of time．You'd better have clear information about the weather，and bring proper clothes，a camera，some medicine for common injuries and diseases and so on．On your journey，you must pay attention to what you eat．Be careful with everything everywhere in case your money gets stolen（高分句型二）．
Do you agree with me？Wish you a good journey．                                                         
                                                   Li Hua

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意要点的提炼要全，关键短语和句型要写对，准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，还要注意人称和时态使用要正确．尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次．