Question

【题目】假如你是高二学生李华，请根据以下提示就上周一下午你上体育课的经历写一封英文书信给你的好友王兰，与她分享你的经历和体会。词数：100左右。

1．时间：上周一下午。

2．过程：上课铃响后全班同学在操场上集合，然后做了些准备活动，接着听老师讲解跳远并看他示范，轮到我练习时，我因心情紧张而失败。老师鼓励我不要灰心。我经过反复练习，终于能跳超过2.5米远。

3．体会：有志者，事竟成。

Dear Wang Lan，

I'm writing to tell you one of my unforgettable experiences in my senior school.

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Yours，

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear_Wang_Lan，

I'm_writing_to_tell_you_one_of_my_unforgettable_experiences_in_my_senior_school.

Last Monday afternoon we had a PE lesson.Our teacher taught us to practise the long jump.When the bell rang, we gathered on the playground.After warming－up exercises, the teacher told us the way of the long jump and showed us how to do it.Then we followed the teacher and practised one after another.Soon came my turn, but I felt a bit nervous.Though I failed the first time, my teacher encouraged me and told me not to lose heart.I kept on practising.At last I was able to jump over 2.5 metres.From this experience, I understand that where there's a will, there's a way.

Yours，

Li_Hua

【解析】

这篇书面表达属于应用文，要求写一封申请信。

第一步：审题。审题的目的是获取重要信息。通过审题我们可以确定几个方面的信息。．1.时间：上周一下午。2．过程：上课铃响后全班同学在操场上集合，然后做了些准备活动，接着听老师讲解跳远并看他示范，轮到我练习时，我因心情紧张而失败。老师鼓励我不要灰心。我经过反复练习，终于能跳超过2.5米远。3．体会：有志者，事竟成。

第二，写作人称为第一人称。第三，时态为一般过去时。第二步：布局段落，确定主要段落，次要段落，段落数量。这篇写作段落数量两段。第一段写信目的。第二段，1．时间：上周一下午。2．过程：上课铃响后全班同学在操场上集合，然后做了些准备活动，接着听老师讲解跳远并看他示范，轮到我练习时，我因心情紧张而失败。老师鼓励我不要灰心。我经过反复练习，终于能跳超过2.5米远。3．体会：有志者，事竟成。其中第二段为重点段落。

第三步：确定关键词汇和短语： practice the long jump， warming－up exercises，nervous，fail，encourage，lose heart，gathered on the playground。

第四步：确定较为高级的句子:When the bell rang, we gathered on the playground. Though I failed the first time, my teacher encouraged me and told me not to lose heart. I understand that where there's a will, there's a way.

第五步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连接词进行过渡衔接:Last Monday afternoon, Then, At last, From this experience.

第六步：注意书写，保持卷面整洁，避免划线，乱擦。