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16．Tchaikovsky，a famous Russian composer of the late-Romantic period，was born on 7 May 1840 in the mountains of western Russia．He was the first Russian composer whose music made a lasting impression internationally．Tchaikovsky's training set him on a path to combine what he had learned with the native musical practices to which he had been exposed from childhood．He first helped write a song in 1844，at an age when most children are still in kindergarten．At home，his mother sang folk songs，which helped develop his interest in music．Mozart was Tchaikovsky's favourite composer and he influenced Tchaikovsky's life and work．For 11 years，beginning in 1866，Tchaikovsky taught at the Moscow School of Music．During his time there，he wrote music for the piano，along with ballets，operas and symphonies．He was famous for writing the music for the ballet Swan Lake in 1876．Because of his musical talent，Tchaikovsky toured many countries as a conductor，including a voyage to the USA in 1891．He continued to write for the ballet until his death in Saint Petersburg in 1893．
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Tchaikovsky's talent in music is just the first step to success．His mother，idol，hard work also play an important part in the process of his success．He is even committed to music until death．
After reading through Tchaikovsky's life story，we can learn upwards of two lessons as follows．First，one should set a big goal and spare no effort in achievingit．Tchaikovsky's life-long goal was to catch up with his idol Mozart，who influenced his life and work．Second，one should commit one's whole being to work．Tchaikovsky wrote music for ten years and finally created his masterpiece，Swan Lake．
When it comes to commitment to work，I shall count it as a personal favour．I was once poor in math，but I swore to get it improved in my senior year，so I devoted myself to math in classroom，library and anywhere possible and made it eventually．（151 words）．

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分析 写好这类作文要注意几个步骤：1． 认真审题，找准提示语中的关键词或句，确定中心思想．2． 依据关键句，草拟提纲，梳理文章的脉络3． 准确定位人称、时态．注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次．4．最后还要认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等
高分句型一：
Tchaikovsky's life-long goal was to catch up with his idol Mozart，who influenced his life and work
柴可夫斯基的终身目标是赶上他的偶像莫扎特，他影响他的生活和工作．
高分句型二：
I was once poor in math，but I swore to get it improved in my senior year，so I devoted myself to math in classroom，library and anywhere possible and made it eventually．
曾经在数学方面很糟糕，但我发誓要在高中一年级时提高它，所以我在教室、图书馆和任何可能的地方致力于数学，最终攻克了他．

解答 Tchaikovsky's talent in music is just the first step to success．His mother，idol，hard work also play an important part in the process of his success．He is even committed to music until death．
      After reading through Tchaikovsky's life story，we can learn upwards of two lessons as follows．First，one should set a big goal and spare no effort in achieving it．Tchaikovsky's life-long goal was to catch up with his idol Mozart，who influenced his life and work（高分句型一）．Second，one should commit one's whole being to work．Tchaikovsky wrote music for ten years and finally created his masterpiece，Swan Lake．
      When it comes to commitment to work，I shall count it as a personal favour．I was once poor in math，but I swore to get it improved in my senior year，so I devoted myself to math in classroom，library and anywhere possible and made it eventually（高分句型二）．（151 words）

点评 开放性作文给出一定的写作主题，并此为基础进行思维和联想，自由发挥．不仅考查学生在内容、结构安排、语言运用和组织方面的能力，而且对学生的想像力、发散思维、归纳判断能力也有很高的要求．