假如你是李夏．你看到关国留学生Sharon 在网上发贴.希望有人能帮助她提高普通话水平.她可以教英语作为回报．请银据以下提示用英语给她写一封电于哪件．(1)表达给她提供帮助的意愿,(2)说明你能胜任辅导的理由,(3)给出讲好普通话的两点建议,(4)提出你学习英语的具体需求．注意:(1)词数120左右.开头语已为你写好,(2)可以适当增加细� 题目和参考答案——青夏教育精英家教网—

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8．假如你是李夏．你看到关国留学生Sharon 在网上发贴，希望有人能帮助她提高普通话（Mandarin）水平，她可以教英语作为回报．请银据以下提示用英语给她写一封电于哪件．
（1）表达给她提供帮助的意愿；
（2）说明你能胜任辅导的理由；
（3）给出讲好普通话的两点建议；
（4）提出你学习英语的具体需求．
注意：
（1）词数120左右，开头语已为你写好；
（2）可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
（3）文中不得透漏个人姓名和学校名称
Hi Sharon，
This is Li Xia．I learned from your post that you want to improve your MandarmI am quite interested in it． I think I'm fit for it．As a student，I have been learning Mandarin for many years．In addition，I am Chinese，which means Mandarin is a must for me to communicate with others in my daily life． So I'm quite confident that I can help you learn Mandarin．
Learning Mandarin takes time，so if you want to learn it well，you should spend much time practicing Mandarin everyday．As the saying goes，practice makes perfect． Besides，you can also read some books in Chinese，see some Chinese films and listen to some Chinese radio programmes．Speaking and listening are very important for a language learning，by which you are sure to make great progress．
In your post，you say you can teach English as a reward．It is just what I want．I'm eager to improve my English．So，if you allow me to help you learn Mandarin，you can also help me improve my English．We can contact each other by video chat every night for half an hour in English and half an hour in Chinese，so that we can improve our oral speaking．
Hope for you early reply!
Yours Sincerely
Li Xia．

分析本文为应用文---电子邮件的写作，属于提纲作文．在写作时应使用第一人称，时态主要为一般现在时．重要短语：learned from （向…学习），be fit for （胜任），a must（必须物），practice makes perfect （熟能生巧），make great progress （取得进展），be eager to（渴望做），contact（联系，接触）．

解答 Hi Sharon，
This is Li Xia．I learned from your post that you want to improve your Mandarin．I am quite interested in it．（提供帮助的意愿）I think I'm fit for it．As a student，I have been learning Mandarin for many years．In addition，I am Chinese，which means Mandarin is a must for me to communicate with others in my daily life．【高分句型】So I'm quite confident that I can help you learn Mandarin．（说明能胜任辅导的理由）
Learning Mandarin takes time，so if you want to learn it well，you should spend much time practicing Mandarin everyday．As the saying goes，practice makes perfect．【高分句型】Besides，you can also read some books in Chinese，see some Chinese films and listen to some Chinese radio programmes．Speaking and listening are very important for a language learning，by which you are sure to make great progress．【高分句型】（给出讲好普通话的两点建议）
In your post，you say you can teach English as a reward．It is just what I want．I'm eager to improve my English．So，if you allow me to help you learn Mandarin，you can also help me improve my English．We can contact each other by video chat every night for half an hour in English and half an hour in Chinese，so that we can improve our oral speaking．（提出你学习英语的具体需求）【高分句型】
Hope for you early reply!
Yours Sincerely
Li Xia

点评提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点．根据要点适当发挥，增加细节．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．