Question

9．假设你是李华，你在英国的笔友Tommy最近为自己发胖感到苦恼．请你根据所给提示，给他发一封100词左右的电子邮件．邮件内容包括：
1．可能造成发胖的原因 （如饮食、锻炼…），至少写出两条；
2．简述你自己相关的健康生活方式．
注意：邮件开头和落款已经为你写好．
Dear Tommy，
I am really feeling bad that you are being troubled by overweight these days．
            ．
Yours
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇作文要求你帮笔友Tommy给出避免发胖的建议．注意题中已经给出的两点提示，主要围绕这两条行文，还可以自己添加建议．注意用到第二人称，时态为一般现在时．重要短语：
 go on a diet 节食，suggest sb．do，建议某人做…
高分句子：
1．It is said that overweight kids don't exercise enough or eat right．本句含有重要句型，It is said…据说…
2．No matter what causes your problem，I suggest you go on a diet or just eat less for half a year and see the result．本句前半句为为what引导的条件状语从句，丰富了句子结构．

解答 Dear Tommy，
 I am really feeling bad that you are being troubled by overweight these days．
      I have read an article about overweight kids．It is said that overweight kids don't exercise enough or eat right（高分句型）．Some kids are overweight because fast food restaurants serve the wrong foods or it's a problem of genes（点明发胖原因）．No matter what causes your problem，I suggest you go on a diet or just eat less for half a year and see the result（高分句型）．
      Also，don't forget to take more exercise．You know，every afternoon after class I play basketball together with my classmates（给出建议）．
      Hope you feel better and look forward to good news about you．
 Yours，
 Li Hua

点评 要想使自己的书面表达得高分，首先要做到扬长避短．"扬长"就是发挥自身的优势，使用熟练掌握的句型，"避短"就是避开自己的弱点，尽量做到不犯错误或少犯错误，这是读写任务得分的关键所在．