Question

【题目】假如你是李华，即将参加全国英语演讲比赛。请给外教Peter发封电子邮件，询问是否可以将演讲稿发给他，请他修改（revise），并说明演讲比赛的主题及举行时间。

注意：1. 词数100左右；

2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

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Answer 1

【答案】Dear Peter,

How are things with you? I’m writing to ask if I can email you my speech written for the annual National English Speech Contest, bearing the title “ Your Future Depends Mostly on You.”

The contest, which will be held on May 25, enables me to improve my English and other skills. I cherish this opportunity and worked tirelessly to rewrite the speech several times. But it is still far from satisfactory to me; it does not seem sufficiently expressive as expected because of my limited knowledge of the English language. I wonder if you can revise the speech and email your revised version to me before May 23. Many thanks!

I’m looking forward to your reply. Best wishes!

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生写一封电子邮件给外教Peter，请他帮忙修改演讲比赛稿。

第一步：审题

体裁：应用文

时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时

结构：总分法

总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

要求：1. 是否可以给Peter发演讲稿；

2. 演讲比赛的主题及举行时间；

3. 请求帮忙修改演讲比赛稿。

第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）

National English Speech Contest；enable sb. to do sth.；cherish this opportunity；be satisfactory to sb.；limited knowledge

第三步：连词成句

1. I’m writing to ask if I can email you my speech written for the annual National English Speech Contest,

2. The contest, which will be held on May 25, enables me to improve my English and other skills.

3. I cherish this opportunity and worked tirelessly to rewrite the speech several times.

4. But it is still far from satisfactory to me;

5. it does not seem sufficiently expressive as expected because of my limited knowledge of the English language.

(根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。）

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last, Last but not least

2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not only…but (also), including, also

3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although + clause (从句), In spite of + n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

5表换一种方式表达：In other words, that is to say,

6.表进行举例说明：For example; For instance; such as + n/doing

7.表陈述事实：In fact, frankly speaking

8.表选择：either…or…，or

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。

第五步：润色修改