Question

11．假定你叫李华，参加了一个在伦敦举办的冬令营．在闭营式上，请你代表全体营员发言．请根据以下提示信息，写一篇英语发言稿．
1．得到了寄宿家庭的悉心照顾；
2．提高了英语水平；
3．参观了名校（如：牛津大学，剑桥大学）和名胜古迹．
注意：
1．词数100左右，开头语已为你写好，不计入总词数；
2．应适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3．文中不得出现真实的地名、校名和人名；
4．提示词：牛津大学Oxford University剑桥大学Cambridge University
Dear friends，
I'm Li Hua．I feel greatly honored to be speaking here on behalf of all the Camp members．First I'd like to express our sincere thanks to all the teachers and host families here who have given us a lot of help both of in life and study．（高分句型一）
During the past few weeks in London we had a wonderful time and achieved a lot．The host parents took good care of us，which made us feel at home．（高分句型二）And with the help of the teachers here we have made great progress in English．Meanwhile，we have known more about western history and culture after visiting so many places of interest．What's more，the visit to some famous university，such as Oxford University and Cambridge broadened our horizons．（高分句型三）
Thank you so much!．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假定你叫李华，参加了一个在伦敦举办的冬令营．在闭营式上，请你代表全体营员发言．请根据以下提示信息，写一篇英语发言稿，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：得到了寄宿家庭的悉心照顾；提高了英语水平；参观了名校（如：牛津大学，剑桥大学）和名胜古迹．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：on behalf of代表；take good care of悉心照顾；feel at home感到轻松自在；with the help of the 在…的帮助之下；Meanwhile同时；What's more而且；
First I'd like to express our sincere thanks to all the teachers and host families here who have given us a lot of help both of in life and study．（高分句型一）
The host parents took good care of us，which made us feel at home．（高分句型二）
What's more，the visit to some famous university，such as Oxford University and Cambridge broadened our horizons．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear friends，
       I'm Li Hua．I feel greatly honored to be speaking here on behalf of all the Camp members．First I'd like to express our sincere thanks to all the teachers and host families here who have given us a lot of help both of in life and study．（高分句型一）
       During the past few weeks in London we had a wonderful time and achieved a lot．The host parents took good care of us，which made us feel at home．（高分句型二）And with the help of the teachers here we have made great progress in English．Meanwhile，we have known more about western history and culture after visiting so many places of interest．What's more，the visit to some famous university，such as Oxford University and Cambridge broadened our horizons．（高分句型三）
       Thank you so much!

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．