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12．假定你是高中生李华．你班同学决定举行班级春游．请你写一封邮件邀请外教Susan参加，要点包括：
1．时间：4月22日早8点北门出发；下午5点公园入口处集合返校；
2．地点：东湖绿道；
3．内容安排：绿道骑自行车；户外野餐（食物自备）；小组自由活动．
注意：
1．词数100左右，开头语已为你写好；
2．可以适当添加细节，以使行文连贯．
参考词汇：东湖绿道 The East Lake Greenway
Hi Susan，
We're planning a spring outing for the whole class．
We'd like to invite you to join us in this activity．
Regarded as the most beautiful greenway with its breath-taking scenery，the East Lake Greenway has become a hot tourist attraction of Wuhan．（高分句型一）Therefore，we decide to organize the spring outing there．We'll gather at the school North Gate at 8 am on April 22nd．After our arrival at the Greenway，the whole class will be divided into several groups．Riding bikes along the way，taking photos and having an outdoor picnic are what on our schedule．（高分句型二）You can join whichever groups to experience fun and excitement．Oh，one more thing，don't forget to show up at 5 pm，when we gather to go back to school together at the entrance of the Cherry Blossom Garden．（高分句型三）
It will be nice to have a good time with you in the spring outing．Expecting your reply and your coming as well．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假定你是高中生李华．你班同学决定举行班级春游．请你写一封邮件邀请外教Susan参加，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：（1）时间：4月22日早8点北门出发；下午5点磨山樱园入口处集合返校；（2）地点：东湖绿道；（3）内容安排：绿道骑行；户外野餐（食物自备）；小组自由活动． 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：therefore因此；show up出现，露面；have a good time过的愉快；Regarded as the most beautiful greenway with its breath-taking scenery，the East Lake Greenway has become a hot tourist attraction of Wuhan．（高分句型一） 
Riding bikes along the way，taking photos and having an outdoor picnic are what on our schedule．（高分句型二）Oh，one more thing，don't forget to show up at 5 pm，when we gather to go back to school together at the entrance of the Cherry Blossom Garden．（高分句型三）

解答 Hi Susan，
       We're planning an spring outing for the whole class．We'd like to invite you to join us in this activity． 
       Regarded as the most beautiful greenway with its breath-taking scenery，the East Lake Greenway has become a hot tourist attraction of Wuhan．（高分句型一）Therefore，we decide to organize the spring outing there．We'll gather at the school North Gate at 8 am on April 22nd．After our arrival at the Greenway，the whole class will be divided into several groups．Riding bikes along the way，taking photos and having an outdoor picnic are what on our schedule．（高分句型二）You can join whichever groups to experience fun and excitement．Oh，one more thing，don't forget to show up at 5 pm，when we gather to go back to school together at the entrance of the Cherry Blossom Garden．（高分句型三） 
        It will be nice to have a good time with you in the spring outing．Expecting your reply and your coming as well． 
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                             Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                             Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．