Question

【题目】 书面表达

假如你是某中学的学生Tom。前不久，你参加了全国英语演讲比赛并获得一等奖。请用英语给校刊写一篇文章，谈谈你的体会。内容主要包括：

1．付出才有回报；

2．收获自信和友谊；

3．感激之情。

注意1．词数100左右；

2．可适当增加细节以使行文连贯；

3．开头语已为你写好，不计入总词数。

Looking back to the National English Speaking Competition I took part in several days ago，I have a lot to share with you.

Answer 1

【答案】

Looking back to the National English Speaking Competition I took part in several days ago, I have a lot to share with you.

First of all, I really delighted that I’ve won the first prize in the competition, and it makes me understand the true meaning of the proverb “No pains, no gains”. I also established friendship with students from all over our country, from whom I’ve learned a lot. More importantly, taking this competition has enabled me to overcome my fear of speaking in public, thus developing my self-confidence. Besides, I owe many thanks to my teachers and judges. I couldn’t have done such an excellent job without their help

To sum up, I will always treasure this meaningful and memorable experience.

【解析】试题分析：假如你是某中学的学生Tom。前不久，你参加了全国英语演讲比赛并获得一等奖。请用英语给校刊写一篇文章，谈谈你的体会。内容主要包括：1．付出才有回报；2．收获自信和友谊；3．感激之情。这是一篇明显的提纲作文，就是把文章的情景和内容要求分成块，以条目的形式列出以进行写作。考生在审题的时候应该注意审要求、审文体、审人称、审时态。题文已经告知要求，那么文体应为书信文体，即介绍主要行程；又根据“你是Tom” 写作时即用第一人称“我”，即李华；时态主要用一般现在时即可或一般将来时。考生在写作时应该选择自己最熟悉、最有把握的词语、句型，将要点逐条表达出来。表达时应该综合运用所掌握的知识，避开生僻的词汇，并克服母语的干扰，按照英语的习惯方式，用地道的英语表达出来，力求做到语言准确无误。然后根据要点选词组句，然后按照篇章结构连句成篇。

【亮点说明】本文语言凝练，论点鲜明，条理层次清晰。文章第二段就开门见山介绍自己获奖的感觉和成长的经历。第二段具体阐释了自己的体会。文章使用了whom引导的定语从句from whom I’ve learned a lot.（从他们身上我学到很多）；动词ing形式做主语，taking this competition has enabled me to overcome my fear of speaking in public（参加比赛让我克服了在公众场合讲话的恐惧）。高级短语和结构：owe thanks to感激，first of all首先。最后一句使用to sum up总结，给文章一个完美的结束。