Question

【题目】假如你是李华，暑假期间你去了北京旅游，参观了长城、故宫等名胜古迹，但是所有的景点人满为患。请你用英语写一篇短文发表在校英语报上。

内容包括：

1. 旅途的经历

2. 存在的问题

3. 自己的想法及建议

注意：词数100左右

Answer 1

【答案】

During the summer holidays, I went on a journey to Beijing, where I visited the Great Wall and the Palace Museum. Much to my surprise, there were so many tourists in all the scenic spots that I had to push my way through the crowd. To be honest, I had a hard time all the way and didn’t find the visit enjoyable or worthwhile at all.

As far as I am concerned, a great many people have the same experience, so I think that the number of tourists in some popular places of interest should be limited. In addition, it’s better for us to travel at different times. Only in this way can we tourists have fun with the beautiful scenery there.

【解析】

试题分析：本文是提纲类写作，要点已给出。写作时不要逐句翻译，可适当增加细节以使行文连贯同时要把所提示的点写全，语句通顺，同时要注意准确运用时态、语态、上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。根据句意适当使用并列连词，同时也要合理运用高级词汇和高级句子为文章增色添彩。

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