题目内容
【题目】假设你是李华,你的笔友Jack来信告诉你他想和几个同学开一家网上书店,想征求你的意见。请根据以下要点给Jack写一封回信。
1. 好处:可以学会理财及与人沟通,自己看书更方便等;
2. 劣势:占用比较多的时间,经验不足,市场把握不好等;
3. 提出建议。
注意:1. 词数120左右;
2. 可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
3. 开头语与结尾已为你写好,不计入总词数。
Dear Jack,
I was very happy to receive your letter telling me about your plan of opening an online bookstore with some classmates.
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Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Hua
【答案】Dear Jack,
I was very happy to receive your letter telling me about your plan of opening an online bookstore with some classmates.
It would be a great idea because you can learn how to manage money and how to communicate with others effectively. Besides,it will be easier for you to read new books so that you can learn more. However,opening an online bookstore will take up a lot of your spare time. Apart from this,you have little experience in the field and if you don’t know what books are in demand,you may lose some money.
I think you should do some research first and learn how to run an online bookstore.What’s more,you’d better do the business during holidays.
I’m looking forward to hearing from you again.
Best wishes!
Yours
Li Hua
【解析】本篇书面表达属于应用文,要求写一份回信,给出朋友Jack要开办网上书店的想法的建议。要点都已经给出,书信类短文的关键在于要点要全面包括,不能有遗漏和省略。但是要点只是提纲,考生可根据想法扩充一些细节内容,但要合理,与要点不冲突。同时注意谋篇布局的顺序,运用合适的连接词连接全文,同时选择高级的词汇和语法项目让文章更有文采。审题时注意本文以现在时和将来时为主,描述要尽量选择简洁的语言,运用合适的语法规则和词汇把各要点都准确表述出。难点在于选择词汇和句型,可以灵活运用高级词汇和固定短语准确表述。还要用适当的连接词被句子连接起来,这样文章显得更连贯。
【亮点说明】本篇范文结构合理,涵盖了所有要点。文章使用了大量的连贯性过渡性词语,比如besides,however,apart from,what’s more等。这些词语的使用使得文章连贯流畅,整体性和逻辑性都非常好。