Question

12．请根据下列提示，用英语为某品牌一款智能手机写一篇促销说明．

必要性	手机是人们联系工具之一．
颜色	黑色和白色
功能	收发短信，照相，上1，下载音乐，浏览1页…
其他	MP4、自选游戏…

注意：1．词数100左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
参考词汇：浏览 browse
Thanks for choosing our smart phones．As we know，mobile phones have become the most important way of communication，with which we can get in touch with each other wherever and whenever we are．（高分句型一）
This product of us has many different functions to meet different needs，such as sending or receiving short messages．Besides，you won′t take pains to carry your camera any more，for the mobile phone itself has one．（高分句型二）Thus，you can take pictures whenever you like．What′s more，with the function of surfing the Internet，it allows you to browse web pages and download what you want．（高分句型三）It can even bring you a flood of music and movies．Most importantly，it can be used as an MP4 as well as a computer game player．
As for colours，we offer you the choice between white and black．．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于图表类作文，根据提示信息请根据下列提示，用英语为某品牌一款智能手机写一篇促销说明，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：必要性，颜色，功能等 2、图表是文章的总体框架，要在图表的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：As we know众所周知；get in touch with 与…取得联系；Besides另外；Thus因此；What′s more而且；Most importantly更重要的是；  As for 至于，关于；as well as也，和
As we know，mobile phones have become the most important way of communication，with which we can get in touch with each other wherever and whenever we are．（高分句型一）
Besides，you won′t take pains to carry your camera any more，for the mobile phone itself has one．（高分句型二）
What′s more，with the function of surfing the Internet，it allows you to browse web pages and download what you want．（高分句型三）

解答 Thanks for choosing our smart phones．As we know，mobile phones have become the most important way of communication，with which we can get in touch with each other wherever and whenever we are．（高分句型一）
       This product of us has many different functions to meet different needs，such as sending or receiving short messages．Besides，you won′t take pains to carry your camera any more，for the mobile phone itself has one．（高分句型二）Thus，you can take pictures whenever you like．What′s more，with the function of surfing the Internet，it allows you to browse web pages and download what you want．（高分句型三）It can even bring you a flood of music and movies．Most importantly，it can be used as an MP4  as well as a computer game player．
      As for colours，we offer you the choice between white and black．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．