题目内容
【题目】假设你是李华。你的两位朋友Tom与Peter几天前产生了误会。Peter的生日即将来临,Tom想送他一个礼物来缓和关系,修复友情,特地发来邮件寻求你的建议。请你根据以下要点给Tom回一封邮件:
1、礼物选择;
2、你的理由;
3、其他建议。
注意:1. 词数100左右;
2. 开头和结尾已为你写好,不计入总词数。
Dear Tom,
I’m glad to hear that you are considering making up with Peter.
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Best wishes
Yours,
Li Hua
【答案】Dear Tom,
I’m glad to hear that you are considering making up with Peter. If I were you, I would consider a bike as a birthday present for him.
As far as I know, Peter is always in poor health so he can take more exercise by riding a bike to build up his body. In the meanwhile, you can often go outing by bike together, which is helpful to rebuild your friendship. Besides, taking a bike is an environmentally-friendly means of transport. It’s convenient for him to get around as well.
Apart from giving him a gift, you can also adopt other means, such as travelling, seeing a movie, having dinner and going shopping. No matter what you do, being sincere is the most important. I really hope that we can be good friends forever.
Best wishes
Yours,
Li Hua
【解析】本文属于提纲式作文。题干给出了写作背景(你的两位朋友Tom与Peter几天前产生了误会。Peter的生日即将来临,Tom想送他一个礼物来缓和关系,发来邮件寻求你的建议,给Tom回封信)以及写作要点提示(信件中给出关于礼物选择的建议,说明理由,并给出其他建议)。成文时应注意以下几点:(1)内容要点齐全,完整叙述主要内容。(2)使用正确的人称。(3)时态:一般现在时为主。(4)适当使用一些连词和插入语,使文章自然、流畅。(5)恰当使用一些高级词汇和句型,以增加文章的档次。根据题目的要求和我们上面提到的注意点,列出提纲:第一部分:建议送给Peter的生日礼物(送自行车作为礼物);第二部分:说明送这个礼物的理由(锻炼身体,增强体质;一起外出;环保而且使用方便);第三部分:其他建议。
【亮点说明】
本文结构紧凑,层次分明,而且使用了多种表达: 1.使用高级句型:虚拟现在的条件状语从句If I were you, I would consider a bike as a birthday present for him.;使用非限制性定语从句In the meanwhile, you can often go outing by bike together, which is helpful to rebuild your friendship.;形式主语it的使用It’s convenient for him to get around as well.;no matter what引导的让步状语从句No matter what you do, being sincere is the most important.;宾语从句的使用I really hope that we can be good friends forever.。2.使用了过渡词语:Besides等。3.使用了重要短语:as far as I know就我所知;take exercise锻炼; build up逐渐增强,增进;get around随意走动,传播,说服;apart from除此之外。