Question

6．阅读下面短文，然后按要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文．
Once upon a time in a land far away，there was a wonderful old man who loved everything：animals，spiders，insects…
One day while walking through the woods the nice old man found a cocoon（茧）of a butterfly．He took it home．A few days later，a small opening appeared； he sat and watched the butterfly for several hours as it struggled to force its body through that little hole．Then it seemed to stop making any progress．It appeared as if it had gotten as far as it could and it could go no farther．
Then the man decided to help the butterfly，so he took a pair of scissors and cut off the remaining bit of the cocoon．
The butterfly then came out with ease．
But it had a swollen body and small，shriveled（萎缩的）wings．The man continued to watch the butterfly because he expected that，at any moment，the wings would enlarge and expand to be able to support the body．Neither happened!In fact，the butterfly spent the rest of its life crawling around with a swollen body and shriveled wings．It never was able to fly．
What the kind-hearted man did not understand was that the restricting cocoon and the struggle required for the butterfly to get through the tiny opening were Nature's way of forcing fluid（液体）from the body of the butterfly into its wings so that it would be ready for flight once it achieved its freedom from the cocoon．
Sometimes struggles are exactly what we need in our life．If we were allowed to go through our life without any hardships，it would fail us．We would not be as strong as what we could have been．And we could never fly．
写作内容
1．以约30个词概括上文的主要内容．
2．以约120个词就"个人成长需要艰难生活的磨砺"的主题发表看法，至少包含以下内容要点：
（1）你读了这个故事的感受；
（2）叙述当前父母溺爱子女的现象和由此造成的后果；
（3）假如你是父母的一方，你会如何磨砺自己的孩子？
写作要求
1．你可以使用实例或其他论述方法支持你的观点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子．
2．作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称．
评分标准
概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯．
A kind man cut a cocoon open in order to lessen the pain of a butterfly when he saw it struggling out of the cocoon，only to find that it could never fly because of his help．
The story sets me thinking．Our life is more or less like this．Sometimes，struggles or obstacles in our life are a must for our growth．It is these struggles or obstacles that increase our willpower and contribute to our success．Without these trials，we could never achieve our life goal just as the butterfly did in the story．
Nowadays，with only one child in most families，parents do whatever they can to satisfy the child's needs and even do for him what should be done by himself．Consequently，the child is unable to look after himself without his parents'presence．Too much care from parents deprives children of chances to grow strong by conquering obstacles．
　 If I were a parent，I would first keep him well informed that life is never easy and that he should be ready to face any difficulties．Besides，I would expose him to the hardships in life instead of protecting him from difficulties，providing them with chances to fight for his bright future by conquering challenges．．

Answer 1

分析 本文是读写任务型写作，这类作文可按照三段式模板写：第一段：概况所给短文要点．第二段：过渡词引出主题句---阐述理由．第三段：个人观点．特别要注意第一段的概括．用自己的语言概括，不能照搬照抄原文． 时态用一般现在时．人称用第一和第三人称． 重要短语：in order to （为了），lessen the pain（减轻痛苦），sets sb thinking（让某人思考），more or less（或多或少），achieve one's life goal （实现某人的目标），satisfy one's needs （满足某人需要），look after （照顾），deprive sb of…（剥夺某人某物），keep sb well informed（使…被通知，告诉），be ready to do（乐意做某事），face any difficulties （面对任何挑战），expose sb to…（使某人接触，体验），instead of （相反），protect sb from…（保护某人免受…），fight for （为…而战），conquer challenges（征服挑战）．
【高分句型一】
1．A kind man cut a cocoon open in order to lessen the pain of a butterfly when he saw it struggling out of the cocoon，only to find that it could never fly because of his help．此处是由动词不定式"only to do"作结果状语，表意料之外的结果，主句为"A kind man cut a cocoon open in order to lessen the pain of a butterfly when he saw it struggling out of the cocoon"．
【高分句型二】
1．It is these struggles or obstacles that increase our willpower and contribute to our success．
此处是强调句型，结构为"It+is/was+强调部分+that+…"，如果去掉强调句型的骨架"It was/is …that"，原句句子成分齐全，句意通顺．
【高分句型三】
2．If I were a parent，I would first keep him well informed that life is never easy and that he should be ready to face any difficulties．
此处是虚拟语气在"if"条件状语从句中的用法，表示对现在情况的虚拟，从句中谓语动词用"were/过去式"，主句中谓语动词用"would/could/might/+动词原形"．
【高分句型四】
4．I would expose him to the hardships in life instead of protecting him from difficulties，providing them with chances to fight for his bright future by conquering challenges．
此处是由现在分词短语"providing"作伴随状语，主句为"Only+【状语成分：介词短语/when、if引导的从句/时间副词】+一般疑问句形式"，主句的主语"I"与所给动词"provide"构成逻辑上的主动关系．

解答 A kind man cut a cocoon open in order to lessen the pain of a butterfly when he saw it struggling out of the cocoon，only to find that it could never fly because of his help．【高分句型一】（概括）
The story sets me thinking．Our life is more or less like this．Sometimes，struggles or obstacles in our life are a must for our growth．It is these struggles or obstacles that increase our willpower and contribute to our success．【高分句型二】Without these trials，we could never achieve our life goal just as the butterfly did in the story．（读了这个故事的感受）
Nowadays，with only one child in most families，parents do whatever they can to satisfy the child's needs and even do for him what should be done by himself．Consequently，the child is unable to look after himself without his parents'presence．Too much care from parents deprives children of chances to grow strong by conquering obstacles．（叙述当前父母溺爱子女的现象和由此造成的后果）
　 If I were a parent，I would first keep him well informed that life is never easy and that he should be ready to face any difficulties．【高分句型三】Besides，I would expose him to the hardships in life instead of protecting him from difficulties，providing them with chances to fight for his bright future by conquering challenges．【高分句型四】
（个人观点：作为一个父母，如何磨砺自己的孩子）

点评 读写任务型写作是将阅读与写作有机结合，要求考生既能读懂文章信息，又要依据要求规范连贯地表达内容，其中准确概括很有挑战且十分重要，根据记叙文、议论文、说明文等不同文体作相应概括，总的来说，遵循以下步骤：确定主题句；寻找关键词；重构主题句；重组支持句．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．