Question

5．学校英语报正在酝酿改版，拟从现有的三个栏目（健康、娱乐、文化）中去除一个，并从三个备选栏目（时尚、职业规划、读者反馈）中挑选一个纳入该报．假设你是该校学生程飞，给校报编辑写一封电子邮件，表达你的观点．邮件须包括以下内容：
1．你建议去除的栏目及去除的理由；
2．你建议增加的栏目及增加的理由．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提纲作文．根据所提供的材料信息，给校报编辑写一封电子邮件，就学校英语报改版，拟从现有的三个栏目（健康、娱乐、文化）中去除一个，并从三个备选栏目（时尚、职业规划、读者反馈）中挑选一个纳入该报事宜发表自己的观点．
写作时人称以第一和第三人称为主，时态以一般现在时为主．
写作要点：1．表示对客人的欢迎；2．介绍此项活动（如活动目的、内容等）3．表达对客人的祝愿；
重要短语：reform sth（代表），be replaced by（被代替），share sth with sb（与某人分享某物），needless to say （更不用说），according to （根据），have positive effects on（对…有影响），be of great significance（非常有意义），loss of （损失），keep fit（保持健康），contributes to（促成），broaden one's horizons（拓宽某人的视野），in turn （反过来又），be beneficial to （对…有益）．
【高分句型一】
1．①Compared to the entertainment，I hold the view ②that the value of the columns concerning health and culture is more important．
①此处是过去分词作状语，主句为"I hold the view that the value of the columns concerning health and culture is more important"，主句的主语为"I"与所给动词存在逻辑上的被动关系．
②此处是由连接词"that"引导的同位语从句，"that"引导的同位语从句解释说明"view"的具体内容．
【高分句型二】
2．The main factor is that it is of great significance to keep healthy while loss of health means kissing goodbye to life．
此处是由连接词"that"引导的表语从句，主语为"The main factor"，谓语动词为"is"．
【高分句型三】
3．the progress in acquiring cultures contributes to broadening one's horizons，which in turn is beneficial to one's study and the establishment of philosophy of life．
此处是由关系代词"which"引导的非限制性定语从句，"which"在从句中作主语，指代前面整个主句的内容．
【高分句型四】
4．Here I am in the hope that my advice will add a brilliant touch to the improved version of our school English Post．
此处是由连接词"that"引导的同位语从句，连接词"that"解释说明名词"hope"的具体内容．

解答 Dear Editor，
I've learned that our English Post is being reformed and one of the three columns is to be replaced by a new one．I'm writing this e-mail to share with you my opinions．Needless to say，the columns will definitely be designed according to students'interest and have positive effects on their study and life．（写信的目的）
Compared to the entertainment，I hold the view that the value of the columns concerning health and culture is more important．【高分句型一】The main factor is that it is of great significance to keep healthy while loss of health means kissing goodbye to life．【高分句型二】Consequently，more knowledge of how to keep fit can improve the quality of life．In addition，the progress in acquiring cultures contributes to broadening one's horizons，which in turn is beneficial to one's study and the establishment of philosophy of life．【高分句型三】（建议去除的栏目及去除的理由）
Furthermore，the career planning should be taken into account in the school English Post．On the one hand，it covers one's career development a great deal．On the other hand，it makes a great difference to one's career success in the future．（建议增加的栏目及去除的理由）
What has been mentioned above is my personal ideas．Here I am in the hope that my advice will add a brilliant touch to the improved version of our school English Post．【高分句型四】（希望）
Yours sincerely，
Cheng Fei

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．