Question

3．假如你是某中学学生李华，给某英语报纸Lyric Lessons（边唱边学）栏目写一封e-mail，为你的同学、朋友、老师、或父母点一首英文歌（根据所提供的两首歌曲任选一首）．内容包括：1．为谁点歌；2．选择歌曲；3．陈述理由．
要求：1．字数100字左右；2．不得照抄歌词．
Dear Editor，
Dear Editor：
I'm Li Hua，I want to choose the English song called‘You raise me up'for my mother as her birthday gift．
When I was in trouble，only my mother accompany me without hesitation．I still remember when I failed in the exam．I'm so upset that I can't do homework with tears．I waiting and feeling fear in the corner，my mother come and encouraged me with warm．words．She told me to strengthen myself and raised me up from the deep sea．I fear to imagine if my mother didn't help me in need，how helpless will I feel．
So，I'd like to play the song called"You raise me up"for my mother．
Yours Sincerely
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提纲作文．根据所提供的材料信息，写一封电子邮件，在英语报纸Lyric Lessons（边唱边学）栏目为你的同学、朋友、老师或父母点一首英文歌．写作要点包括：1．为谁点歌； 2．选择歌曲；3．陈述理由．写作时人称以第一人称和第三人称为主，时态以一般现在时和一般过去时为主．重要短语：be in trouble（处于麻烦中），accompanysb （陪伴某人），without hesitation （毫不犹豫），fail inthe exam （考试不及格），encourage sb （鼓励某人），be in need （处在需要中），feel helpless（感觉无助），would liketo do （想要做某事）．
【高分句型】
1．I want to choose the English song called‘You raise me up'for my mother as her birthday gift．
这里是过去分词短语作后置定语，被修饰的名词是the English song，called‘You raise me up'for my mother as her birthday gift作后置定语，可理解为定语从句which/that is called‘You raise me up'for my mother as her birthday gift．
2．I waiting and feeling fear in the corner，my mother come and encouraged me with warm words．
这里是独立主格结构，主句是my mother come and encouraged me with warm．words，I waiting and feeling fear in the corner为独立主格结构，由"主格词+现在分词"构成．

解答 Dear Editor：
      I'm Li Hua，I want to choose the Englishsong called‘You raise me up'for my mother as her birthday gift．【高分句型】（为谁点歌）
      When I was in trouble，only my motheraccompany me without hesitation．I still remember when I failed in the exam．I'mso upset that I can't do homework with tears．I waiting and feeling fear in thecorner，my mother come and encouraged me with warm．words．【高分句型】She told me tostrengthen myself and raised me up from the deep sea．I fear to imagine if mymother didn't help me in need，how helpless will I feel．（选择歌曲）
So，I'd like to play the song called"Youraise me up"for my mother．（陈述理由）

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．