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5．假设你是李华，你所在城市的交通拥挤问题日趋严重，交通事故时有发生，特别是在上下班高峰时段．请根据以下提示，用英语给市政府写一封信，反映交通状况并提出自己的建议．
提示：1．反映交通状况；
2．提出改善建议；
3．希望和祝福．
注意：1．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
2．词数100左右；
3．信的开头和结尾已经为你写好，不计入总词数．
Dear Sir/Madam，
I'm writing to reflect the traffic situation of our city．
                                                                                        
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假设你是李华，你所在城市的交通拥挤问题日趋严重，交通事故时有发生，特别是在上下班高峰时段．请根据以下提示，用英语给市政府写一封信，反映交通状况并提出自己的建议．写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：反映交通状况；提出改善建议；希望和祝福2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：
要点一：众所周知，我市的交通问题正变得越来越严重，尤其是高峰时段．
As is known to us，the traffic problem in our city is becoming more and more serious，especially during the rush hours．（as引导非限制性定语从句）
要点二：每天很多车在路上行驶．
Many cars are running on the roads every day．
要点三：其中的一些车况不好的车辆在路上运行，司机很难通过．
Some of them are in bad condition and it is difficult for the drivers to go across．
要点四：我认为到了我们市政府必须采取有效措施来解决这一问题的时候了．
It's high time that the city government took some effective measures to solve the  problem．
要点五：首先，很多路需要加宽修缮．
Firstly，many roads need to be widened and repaired．
要点六：其次，我们需要修建立交桥（overpass）来缓解交通堵塞．
Secondly，we need to build overpasses so as to cut down traffic jams．
要点七：需要严格控制私家车的数量．
The number of private cars must be strictly controlled．
要点八：只要采取上述措施，我相信交通问题会得到解决，交通事故会得到控制．
As long as we take the above measures，I'm sure the traffic problem will be  solved and the traffic accidents will be controlled．
要点九：我希望政府会接受我的建议．
I hope our government will accept my suggestions．
句式升级一：用what引导主语从句改写要点一
What is known to us is that the traffic problem in our city is becoming more and more serious，especially during the rush hours．
句式升级二：用"some of which"引导的定语从句连接要点二、三
Many cars are running on the roads every day，some of which are in bad condition and it is difficult for the drivers to go across．
句式升级三：用do强调要点九
I do hope our government will accept my suggestions．

解答 Dear Sir/Madam，
       I'm writing to reflect the traffic situation of our city．
       What is known to us is that the traffic problem in our city is becoming more and more serious，especially during the rush hours．（高分句型一）Many cars are running on the roads every day，some of which are in bad condition and it is difficult for the drivers to go across．It's high time that the city government took some effective measures to solve the problem．（高分句型二）Firstly，many roads need to be widened and repaired．Secondly，we need to build overpasses so as to cut down traffic jams．Thirdly，the number of private cars must be strictly controlled．
       As long as we take the above measures，I'm sure the traffic problem will be solved and the traffic accidents will be controlled．（高分句型三）And I do hope our government will accept my suggestions．
                                                                                                                                                                                                     Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                    Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．