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【题目】据报道，越来越多的农民去城市打工，孩子被留在农村，成为“留守儿童”。而缺少父母关爱对“留守儿童”的成长极为不利。假设你是林晓，请就这一问题给21st Century编辑部写一封信，阐述“留守儿童”存在的下列问题，并呼吁社会关注。

1．情感寂寞；

2．与人交流出现困难；

3．学习成绩不理想；

4．很多儿童出现心理问题；

5．容易受到伤害。

参考词汇：农村(rural area)；心理的(psychological)

要求：字数100左右。开头和结尾已经为你写好，不计入总词数。

Dear editor，

I'm writing to say something about the problems of children left behind in rural areas.

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Only in this way can we ensure that they will have a good future as other kids.

Best wishes.

Yours，

Lin Xiao

Answer 1

【答案】Dear editor，

I'm writing to say something about the problems of children left behind in rural areas.

It's reported that more and more peasants have moved to work in cities，leaving their children behind in rural areas. The lack of care from their parents will do great harm to the growth of their children. Firstly，they often feel lonely or sad，and many have difficulty in communicating with others. Also，these children usually do badly in their studies. Some even have psychological problems. Furthermore，they can get hurt more easily than other children.

Therefore，I hope that something can be done to help these children，and that more and more care and support should be offered from the community.

Only in this way can we ensure that they will have a good future as other kids.

Best wishes.

Yours，

Lin Xiao

【解析】试题分析：本文是一篇书信体裁的议论文，目的是向报社反映 “留守儿童”的问题，并以此引起社会的关注。行文应用一般现在时及第三人称。除了提出五种问题，还要呼吁社会关心“留守儿童”并想办法解决这些问题。写作时注意时态、语态的合理运用，主次分明，详略得当，语言力求准确、简洁。根据情景的发展，按顺序安排好材料。同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。考生必须认真查验是否有漏写、错写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等。

【亮点说明】

本文是一篇书信，格式正确，语言精练，使用高级句子。It's reported that more and more peasants have moved to work in cities，leaving their children behind in rural areas.运用主语从句，现在分词做自然的结果状语；Furthermore，they can get hurt more easily than other children.句中使用比较级；I hope that something can be done to help these children，宾语从句和被动语态完美结合；另外，Firstly，Also，Furthermore，Therefore，的出现为文章增色添彩。