Question

【题目】阅读下面短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

The elephant and the fly

An elephant was standing and picking leaves from a tree. A small fly came，flying and buzzing (嗡嗡叫) near his ear. The elephant waved it away with his long ears. Then the fly came again, and the elephant waved it away once more.

This was repeated several times. Then the elephant asked the fly, “Why are you so restless and noisy? Why can’t you stay for a while in one place? ”

The fly answered, “I am attracted to whatever I see, hear or smell. My five senses pull me constantly in all directions and I cannot resist them．What is your secret? How can you stay so calm and still?”

The elephant stopped eating and said, “My five senses do not rule my attention. Whatever I do, I get involved in it. Now that I am eating, I am completely absorbed in eating. In this way I can enjoy my food and chew it better. I rule and control my attention, and not the other way around. So when you are in charge of your five senses and attention, your mind will become calm too.”

【写作内容】

1、以约30个词概括短文的内容；

2、然后以约120个词就“专注”这一主题发表你的看法，并包括以下要点：

（1）看完故事后的感受及启发；

（2）描述一段你或他人因受太多干扰而使学习、生活或工作受到影响的不愉快经历；

（3）你打算在高三这一年里如何保持专注、专心。

【写作要求】

1、在作文中可以使用自己亲身的经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2、作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。

【评分标准】概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。

Answer 1

【答案】

An elephant was constantly disturbed by a restless fly, who wondered about the secret of remaining calm. The elephant revealed that calmness would be obtained when one’s senses and attention were focused.

After reading the story, I was inspired by what the elephant said. The ability to focus one’s attention is the key to success in doing anything. Just like the fly, a person who is easily distracted by the surroundings will feel restless and tired, and fail to achieve his success.

This reminds me of my displeased story in Grade One. I was so excited to find that there were after-class activities for us to attend. During the first term, I was attracted by the various activities, such as singing, drawing and so on, and I was eager to take part. As I didn’t spend enough time on my studies, I fell behind my classmates and failed in some important exams.

From this experience I have learned a lesson that one should focus on one thing at a time before he can get it well done. As a Senior Three student, I intend to set a clear goal for myself --It is study that comes first. Now, I am fully aware that only when I have a clear and determined mind and draw my attention on it can I achieve my goal in the end.

【解析】

试题分析：本篇习作为任务型读写作文。阅读材料为故事性的短文。因此概括时应围绕“什么人、发生了什么事、结局如何”来写，即阐述一个故事梗概，忌力陈细节，忌掺入个人评价。所谓简述相似经历，即与原阅读材料的故事一样能揭示同一主题思想而不同情节的故事。确定主题后，挑选一个类似的能说明主题思想的故事。在组织故事时，由于受篇幅的限制，也尽可能省去心理描写和对话等细节，用简练的语言（尽量用间接引语）把故事的过程讲清楚即可。写完故事后，应把你所写的故事和原材料的故事所揭示的主题思想用一两句话写出来, 即篇末点题。

【亮点说明】：本篇习作第一段用30字左右的词数先简单地概括了短文，再点出了本文的主题：专注。第二段说明感想。比较好的句子有Just like the fly, a person who is easily distracted by the surroundings will feel restless and tired, and fail to achieve his success.成功地从故事过度到本文主题。用的很恰当的句子还有第三段第一句This reminds me of my displeased story in Grade One.又从主题联系到自身。最后一段紧扣要点，说明高三将会如何专注。