Question

【题目】书面表达

假设你是学生李华，得知好朋友William在学习中感到压力很大，学习效果甚微，请你给他写一封电子邮件，帮助他放松身心，提高学习效率。

内容要点：

1. 快乐学习，保持愉快的心情；

2. 积极参加体育活动，如打乒乓球、听音乐等；

3. 多与同学交流，互相鼓励。

注意：1.词数100左右，开头和结尾已经为你写好。

2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear William，

Recently, I have heard that you feel stressed about study. Here is some advice on how to study effectively.

First of all, learn in a relaxing way. This will remove our pressure, making study an easy job. Another way to keep up our spirits is to take part in sports. Not only does exercise build up the body, but also it provides us time to relax and fresh our mind, making us memorize things faster and longer. Music, too, is another effective means of refreshing and helping us concentrate better.

Last but not least, we should exchange ideas with our classmates. Through the communication we can find support, which will encourage us to overcome difficulties in our study.

I hope these can benefit you.

Best wishes!

Li Hua

【解析】试题分析：本篇书面表达要求以李华的名义给朋友William写一封电子邮件，帮助他放松身心，提高学习效率。给出的要点有1. 快乐学习，保持愉快的心情；2. 积极参加体育活动，听听歌曲音乐；3. 多与同学交流，互相鼓励。这三个要点的顺序可以根据需要进行调整，而且在写作时也可以发挥想象，增添内容，使文章更加丰满，但要注意分清主次。因为是给别人写邮件提建议，所以注意语言要礼貌，措辞要委婉，而且不要用生僻的词汇。此外，为了增加文章亮点，提高作文的档次，要尽量使用多种句式结构，如倒装句，强调句和各种从句等。

【亮点说明】本篇范文语言通顺流畅，内容表述得体。在文章首段作者开门见山提出写信的目的，通过 Here is some advice on how to study effectively引出三个要点内容，起到了很好的过渡作用.。在讲述三个要点时作者使用了First of all, Last but not least, not only…..but also等连接词使文章具有很强的层次性。分词短语making study an easy job.介词短语Through the communication，定语从句which will encourge us to overcome difficulties in our study.等充分显示了作者对语言句式灵活运用的能力。