Question

书面表达（本题10分）
朋友是人生中不可或缺的一部分，你一定也有好朋友吧？请以“My friend and I”为题，写一篇不少于80字的小短文。最好能用上关于朋友的谚语。

Name	Linda	I
Age	15	15
Personality（个性）	serious	outgoing
Opinions on TV shows	likes sitcoms	can’t stand action movies
Resolutions ways	to be a teacher study hard get good grade	to be a reporter read more keep on writing articles

Answer 1

My friend and I
My best friend, Linda, is the same age as me.
In some ways, we look the same, but in other ways, we look different. For instance, she is serious. However, I’m opposite,I’m outgoing.I like making a lot of friends.Linda likes sitcoms.Maybe that’s because of her personality.
As for me,I can’t stand action movies. I think they are too exciting.When watching them, I feel my heart nearly jumping out of my chest.When talking about future, she says she is going to be a teacher. And in order to achieve her dream,she is going to study hard to get good grade.But for me,I am going to be a reporter so I will read more
And keep on writing articles.
Although we have so many differences, I regard her as my closest sister, that’s because whenever I meet any difficulty, she’ll try her best to help me out. A the saying goes,”A friend in need is a friend indeed.” I know its real meaning from her—my best friend,Linda.

试题分析：这是一篇给材料作文，而且提供材料充分详细。我们要做的就是用地道且完美的语句将这些内容表达出来。根据写作的基本步骤，在认真详细审题的审题之后。先在心中打好腹稿，确定本文的人称，时态，要点，然后再动笔。在不遗漏要点的基础上，适当加以发挥和选取精美的结构和语句。根据材料提供的内容可知，由于本文属于一篇对比性较强的文章所以采取对比描写的方式更能体现双方的不同之处，更能为下文体现真正朋友做铺垫。在写作中作者注意了开头和结尾的设计。不同事件之间应采用合适的连词，保证文章浑然一体，可读性强。
【亮点说明】这篇文章在开篇使用了同位语Linda及the same as结构，使文章开头简洁有力。在第二段又采用了In some ways, we look the same, but in other ways, we look different.承上启下做的很好。For instance的使用使下文的介绍顺畅自然。加之as for ，that’s because of, when doing ,in order to achieve her dream等等一系列结构的运用使文章可读性强。When watching them, I feel my heart nearly jumping out of my chest.When talking about future, she says she is going to be a teacher. 两句中When doing结构的运用，都直接体现了作者的组织运用语言的能力很强。而文章结尾一段朋友和我之间感情的升华，虽然我们有许多不同之处但我仍把她视为最亲的朋友。因为无论何时何地有困难她都尽力帮助我，更体现作者在平时的日常学习中，十分注意总结和扎实基本功，这些对写作都是至关重要的。