Question

【题目】假如你是红星中学高三学生李华。以下四幅图片反映了你所在的城市开展“文明交通月”(Road Civility Month)活动的前后变化。请根据图片的提示，以“Great Changes”为题， 给校报英语专栏写一篇英文稿件。内容要点如下：

1. 开展“文明交通月”活动的前后变化；

2. 你的感想。

注意：1. 短文标题和开头已经给出，不计入总词数；

2. 词数：100词左右。

参考词汇：行人pedestrian；人行横道pedestrian crossing

Great Changes

I am deeply impressed by the great changes that have been taken place in our city since the campaign Road Civility Month was lauched.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Answer 1

【答案】Great Changes

I am deeply impressed by the great changes that have taken place in our city since the campaign Road Civility Month was launched.

In the past, there existed lots of improper behavior in our city. As was often the case, people crossed the road whenever they like, totally ignoring the traffic lights. Besides, some drivers even didn’t slow down when approaching the pedestrian crossing. But now, our city has taken on a new look. Citizens, especially we students, follow the policeman’s direction and well observe the traffic rules while crossing the road. Meanwhile, we often find drivers stop willingly near the pedestrian crossing and let passers-by go first.

I feel proud of these changes, which make our life more harmonious. If all the pedestrians and drivers obey the traffic rules, road safety won’t be a bother to us any more.

【解析】首先审题，这篇文章要求假如你是红星中学高三学生李华。以下四幅图片反映了你所在的城市开展“文明交通月”(Road Civility Month)活动的前后变化。请根据图片的提示，以“Great Changes”为题， 给校报英语专栏写一篇英文稿件。任务中给出的提示信息包含如下内容：1. 开展“文明交通月”活动的前后变化；2. 你的感想。抓住了这亮点，我们就抓住了文章的核心内容。其次选用正确的人称和时态，描写过去，考虑用一般过去时；描写现在，用现在完成时，用第一人称来写。然后写出单个句子，使用正确的连词，连句成段。具体来说，写这篇文章时，要注意:提示中的内容比较泛泛，需要适当补充。这篇文章对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括，缺一不可。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，不能出现文章脱节问题。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。

【亮点说明】本篇书面表达要点全面，结构紧凑，是一篇较好的范文。这篇短文使用了大量的短语，为文章增色不少，如: slow down减速，take on呈现。还使用了定语从句I feel proud of these changes, which make our life more harmonious.等多种句式结构，增加了文章的可读性。