题目内容
【题目】假设你是李华,即将高中毕业,对大学专业选择比较困惑,请给曾经做过生涯规划师的前外教Mr.Joyce写封信,介绍你本人在学习、个性等方面的长处以及你的职业愿景,并请他为你在选择大学专业方面提出一些建议。
注意:1.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
2.词数100左右(格式已给出,不计入总词数)。
Dear Mr. Joyce,
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Yours,
Li Hua
【答案】DearMr. Joyce,
I am Li Hua, one of your former students. It will be only two months before we graduate from high school, yet I am quite confused about what I should choose to major in the university. Since you once worked as a career planner, I am writing to consult you, hoping to get some valuable advice with regard to major application.
I am good at mathematics and physics. Besides, my interest also goes to music, and I have been active in the school's orchestra. As for my job in the future, I want to be a scientist who will help make the world a better place. I am eagerly looking forward to your early reply!
Best wishes.
Yours,
Li Hua
【解析】本篇书面表达属于应用文,要求写一封信。
第1步:根据提示可知,本篇为一封电子邮件;假设你即将高中毕业,对大学专业选择比较困惑,请给曾经做过生涯规划师的前外教Mr.Joyce写封信,介绍你本人在学习、个性等方面的长处以及你的职业愿景,并请他为你在选择大学专业方面提出一些建议。人称使用第一人称,时态应为一般现在时和一般将来时。
第2步:根据写作要求,确定关键词(组),如:former(以前的),graduate from(从……毕业),confused(困惑的),major(主修),career planner(生涯规划师),consult(咨询),valuable(有价值的),be good at(擅长)等。
第3步:根据提示及关键词(组)进行遣词造句,注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第4步:连句成文,注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡,书写一定要规范清晰,保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。
【亮点说明】
范文内容完整,语言规范,语篇连贯,词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级表达方式,如同位语I am Li Hua, one of your former students.;时间状语从句It will be only two months before we graduate from high school;宾语从句yet I am quite confused about what I should choose to major in the university;原因状语从句Since you once worked as a career planner, I am writing to consult you;定语从句As for my job in the future, I want to be a scientist who will help make the world a better place.;非谓语动词的运用I am writing to consult you, hoping to get some valuable advice with regard to major application.全文中没有中国式英语的句式,显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外,文章思路清晰、层次分明,上下句转换自然,为文章增色添彩。