Question

假设你是中学生刘丽，你的妈妈对你的学习成绩要求很苛刻：每次考试必须进入班内前三名；你为此感到很有压力。请根据以下提示用英语给妈妈写一篇书信：
表明自己的想法；
陈述自己的理由；
表达自己的愿望。
注意：1. 词数：120-150；
2. 可适当增加细节， 以使内容充实、行文连贯；
3. 信的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Mum,
I feel it really necessary to have a talk with you and I do hope this letter can help us better understand each other. ____________________________________________________________
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Yours sincerely,
Liu Li

Answer 1

Dear Mum,
I feel it really necessary to have a talk with you and I do hope this letter can help us better understand each other.
Mum, I understand your true love for me, but I have to say your opinion about my study is not quite right.
Firstly, I think high grades are important, but a student can’t be judged only by this standard. A student should develop in every respect, including wisdom, health and life attitude. In addition, hard work is not always a guarantee of top places in class. Good marks depend on many factors, such as diligence, intelligence and good luck. Last but not least, you have put so much pressure on me that every time I take an exam, I always feel nervous and anxious…
So, dear Mum, please don’t be so strict with me in my study any longer. Please let me live like a lovely girl; let me make more friends; and most importantly, let me grow up normally, healthily and happily.
I love you, Mum!
Yours sincerely,
Liu Li

试题分析：考查应用文中的书信的写作。你的妈妈对你的学习成绩要求很苛刻：每次考试必须进入班内前三名；你为此感到很有压力。请根据以下提示用英语给妈妈写一篇书信。要点都已经给出，信件要点包括：表明自己的想法；陈述自己的理由；表达自己的愿望。审题时注意本文使用一般现在时，描述要尽量选择简洁的语言，运用合适的语法规则和词汇把各要点都准确表述出。难点在于选择词汇和句型，可以灵活运用高级词汇和固定短语准确表述。象范文的you have put so much pressure on me that every time I take an exam,使用了every time这样的连词结构，还要用适当的连接词被句子连接起来，象In addition, Last but not least等词，这样文章显得更连贯。
点评：书信类短文的关键在于要点要全面包括，不能有遗漏和省略。同时注意谋篇布局的顺序，运用合适的连接词连接全文，同时选择高级的词汇和语法项目让文章更有文采。