Question

【题目】假如你是学生叶子，你的网友Peter听说美国第一夫人米歇尔(Michelle Obama)访问了你的学校，他想了解当时的情况。请按照以下要点给Peter回一封邮件。
1 具体情况：1）发表演讲并与学生互动；
2）与40名学生上了一堂英语课；
3）参与了一节太极课。
2 发表自己的感想。
注意：1）词数100左右； 2．）可以适当增减细节，以使行文连贯；
3）开头语已为你写好； 4）参考词汇：太极------ Tai Chi
Dear Peter,
In the last letter, you'd like to know something about Mrs. Obama's visit in our school. ……

Yours sincerely,
Ye Zi

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Peter,

In the last letter, you'd like to know something about Mrs. Obama's visit in our school. Now, I am writing to share some information and my feelings with you.

Mrs. Obama began her visit by giving us a speech, during which she told her own stories, highlighted the importance of education and interacted with us. Then she participated in an English class with 40 students and had a lively discussion on varieties of topics, including how students can deal with competition and failure, the value of studying abroad. What impressed me most is that she observed and actively participated in Tai Chi class.

Yours sincerely,

Ye Zi

【解析】本次作文要求网友Peter听说美国第一夫人米歇尔(Michelle Obama)访问了你的学校，他想了解当时的情况。请按照以下要点给Peter回一封邮件。要点包括：1. 具体情况：1）发表演讲并与学生互动；2）与40名学生上了一堂英语课；3）参与了一节太极课。2. 发表自己的感想。故既要完成任务，又要兼顾形式的要求。

写作亮点：本篇条理清楚，要点全面，结构连贯。其句式上的变化既使得文章生动而流畅，也体现了作者驾驭句式的能力。例如：文章运用了定语从句during which she told her own stories, 宾语从句how students can deal with competition and failure, 主语从句What impressed me most和表语从句that she observed and actively participated in Tai Chi class.还运用了highlighted，interacted，participated in 等词汇。