Question

最近，你们班召开了以“我的‘中国梦’”为主题的班会活动。请写一篇日记，记述班会情况及自己的感受。内容要点如下：
1. 每位同学都畅谈了自己对中国梦的理解； 
2. 你谈到了自己的梦想；  
3. 如何实现自己的梦想。
　注意：
1. 总词数120左右；  
2. 不可逐条翻译；  
3.开头已给出，不计入总词数。
Recently we had a class meeting on the topic of My “China Dream”.                                    
                                                                                              
                                                                                              
                                                                                              
                                                                                               
                                                                                              

Answer 1

Recently we had a class meeting on the topic of My “China Dream”. Inspired by President Xi’s China Dream, everyone talked enthusiastically about his understanding of China Dream. We all believe that this dream will come true in the future.
I also talked about my own dream. I have always wanted to be a doctor. Not only can doctors save people’s lives but also they are doing a respectable job. Doctors can also help people to live a better life with their professional knowledge.
To realize my dream, I must try to work hard from now on. I must learn as much as I can so that I can get into a good medical college, where I can prepare myself adequately for the job of a doctor. Only in this way can I accomplish my goal.

解析试题分析：本文是提纲类作文，话题是大家熟悉的中国梦，学生们有话可说，而且文章的要点也基本上都给出来了，但只是一个提纲，考生还需要做适当的发挥。在写作的过程中，要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型，如强调句，倒装句等，让文章更上档次。同时在列举措施的时候要使用合适的连接词如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，让文章看起来很有条理，也很流畅。本篇文章在写作时不要啰嗦，力求简洁的表达自己的观点。
【亮点说明】所给范文语言简洁，不拖拉，使用短语：come true 成为现实，live a better life过着更好的生活，还有范文充分体现高中教材中的重点语法和句式：Inspired by President Xi’s China Dream, everyone talked enthusiastically about his understanding of China Dream.这句话用了过去分词做状语， Not only can doctors save people’s lives but also they are doing a respectable job.这句话用了倒装句， To realize my dream, I must try to work hard from now on. 这句话用了不定式做目的状语，I must learn as much as I can so that I can get into a good medical college, where I can prepare myself adequately for the job of a doctor. 这句话用了结果状语从句和定语从句，Only in this way can I accomplish my goal.这句话也是倒装句。
考点：考查提纲类书面表达