Question

短文写作

请你根据以下提示，结合生活中的一个事例，用英语写一篇短文，谈谈微笑的作用。

The best example of universally understood body language may be the smile.A smile can help us get through difficult situation and find friends in a world of strangers.A smile can open doors and tear down walls.

注意：①无须写标题；

      ②内容只需涉及一个方面；

      ③词数为100左右。

Answer 1

One possible version

I still remember how nervous I was on my first day in the new school three years ago, when I found it difficult to follow my teacher in the first English class. The teacher spoke English throughout the class, which was totally different from the lessons I had taken before.

In the morning class, the next day, the English teacher came to me while I was reading the text aloud as other students. After listening to me for a while, she gave me a big smile and said she like my voice very much. The smile shone on my whole day and the following days. A week later, I volunteered to take charge of English study in my class.

 Thanks to the comforting smile in my first English class. I began to be confident.

解析:

【思路点拨】该文取自生活，又是以例子作为主打的文章，所以考生要完成作文并不难，要得高分的话，可以使用一两个亮点句型，例如用否定加比较级衬托最高级，not only提前的倒装句，插入语，形式主语和without引导的虚拟语气等。能够使用这些句式结构首先要求考生对于这些语法要十分熟悉，其次要学会将这些语法功能化应用于写作。考生们要得高分，英语基础十分重要，重视教材的学习，对考生备考有很大的作用。微笑的作用方方面面，可以先用总结概括性的语句谈一下微笑的作用，然后选取其中一个方面立论，作为文章的第一部分；再选取一个例子紧扣主题进行例证，作为第二部分；最后结尾的时候以点盖面，将微笑的巨大作用推向一个高度，还可以进而倡导多微笑，这是文章的第三部分。

【范文点评】本文思路清晰，首段简介了我的新英语老师的与众不同之处，第二段举例佐证，第三段点明老师对我的影响；作者使用了still，the next day, a week later等衔接性语言，让整个文章浑然一体；应用了较为复杂的句子结构，比如第一句话中使用了宾语从句，how nervous I was...，还套用了一个非限定性定语从句when I found...,以及形式宾语it使得整个句子紧凑，此外，作者还用了shine，take charge of，volunteer等吸引眼球的词语。不失为一篇优秀的书面表达。