Question

【题目】假如你是高三学生李华，今年参加高考，考后就要面临填报志愿， 你一直想当老师， 可父母的愿望是让你当医生。请用英语给你在美国的叔叔写封信， 陈述你的愿望和理由，请求叔叔帮忙，以说服你的父母。

注意：1.词数100左右；

2.开头和结尾已给出（不计入总词数）。

Dear Uncle,

How I miss you! As you know, after the College Entrance Examination, filling the intention for university is around the corner.

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Looking forward to your rely soon!

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Uncle,

How I miss you! As you know, after the College Entrance Examination, filling the intention for university is around the corner. My parents want me to be a doctor. However, being a teacher is my favorite profession.

To begin with, Mr. Wang, a perfect maths teacher, has a great influence on me, from whom I have learned a lot both in my study and in life. Moreover, I like it when I stay with the young and energetic students, helping them learn new things and broaden their horizons. Meanwhile, teachers are highly respected now and I can make full use of summer and winter holidays to do what I like. Typically, my parents like following your opinion. Therefore, I have no choice but to turn to you for help.

Looking forward to your reply soon!

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】试题分析：这是一篇英文书信，信的开头结尾都已经给出了，仅需要写好正文。正文的内容是：你今年参加高考，考后就要面临填报志愿， 你一直想当老师， 可父母的愿望是让你当医生。给叔叔写信， 陈述你的愿望和理由，请求叔叔帮忙，以说服你的父母。写信与写文章一样，内容要表达清楚，语言要简单明了，态度要诚恳礼貌，给叔叔的信还应亲切热情。一定注意必须把规定的内容写清楚。写作正文时就和写提纲作文一样，要点不能省略，要完全包括在内。要注意使用合适的连接词和高级的词汇和短语，也可以使用不同的句式。

【亮点说明】本篇范文要点全面，短小精悍。在文中作者首先提出与父母在报志愿时存在分歧，然后分层陈述自己的理由，从老师对自己的影响，到自己对教学的热爱，再写到做老师被尊重，有假期可以做自己喜欢的事情等，层层递进，清晰连贯。在写作时作者使用了to begin with 、moreover、meanwhile、typically和therefore等连接词使段落更具有层次感。文章还用到了非谓语动词being a teacher作主语和helping them learn new things and broaden their horizons作状语，限制性定语从句from whom I have learned a lot both in my study and in life和宾语从句I like it when I stay with the young and energetic students和do what I like等多种句式结构，并且词组has a great influence on、broaden their horizons和have no choice but to也有效地提升了文章的档次。