题目内容
【题目】假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。请根据下面四幅图的先后顺序,写一篇英文周记,记述你确定大学志愿的过程。
注意:词数不少于60。
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【答案】The past week was by no means ordinary, for I had finally decided on my major.
This Monday, the topic was brought up again by my parents during dinner. I had asked myself the same question many times, but still couldn’t make up my mind. Seeing my hesitant look, mom patted me on my shoulder, her smile encouraging me to do more research.
Later that evening, I turned to the Internet for help. Faced with so many choices, I seemed to be lost. Law could be a good choice. Business and computer science were also attracting top students. I noted down one after another major, but crossed them all off, for what I wanted was a profession that could make a difference in people’s lives.
The inspiration came unexpectedly with the CCTV News yesterday. The moment “Role Models of Our Time” appeared on the screen, I was awed. The news story focused on superheroes without a cape — police officers, healthcare workers, delivery men, city cleaners — who guarded us and ensured our life ran normally. Suddenly, I realized my life’s purpose — relieving pain and saving lives. And to pursue this call, I decided to specialize in medical science.
I jumped excitedly at this idea. Mom and dad were also happy that I had found the compass for my future life, and said they would be so proud to see me in white. Now, determined to become a healthcare worker, whenever I start my schoolwork, I know I am studying for a noble cause.
【解析】
本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生根据所给的四幅图写一篇周记,记述自己确定大学志愿的过程。
第一步:审题
体裁:应用文
时态:根据提示,时态应为一般过去时
人称:第一人称为主
结构:总分总法
总分总法指把主题句作为总说,把支持句作为分说,结尾再重申一下自己的主题,并以这种方式安排所写内容。
要求:1. 挖掘四幅图所给出的信息:图1——和父母讨论大学志愿选什么,图2——自己网上查找大学志愿资料,图3——看电视新闻给自己选大学志愿的启发,图4——确定了自己的大学志愿;
2. 自己确定大学志愿过程中的感悟。
第二步:列提纲(重点词组)
by no means;make up one’s mind;encourage sb.to do sth.;turn to…for help;make a difference;focus on
第三步:连词成句
1. The past week was by no means ordinary, for I had finally decided on my major.
2. I had asked myself the same question many times, but still couldn’t make up my mind.
3. Seeing my hesitant look, mom patted me on my shoulder, her smile encouraging me to do more research.
4. Later that evening, I turned to the Internet for help.
5. for what I wanted was a profession that could make a difference in people’s lives.
6. The news story focused on superheroes without a cape.
(根据提示及关键词(组)进行遣词造句,注意主谓一致和时态问题。)
第四步:连句成篇(衔接词)
1.表文章结构顺序:First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last, Last but not least
2.表并列补充关系:What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not only…but (also), including, also
3.表转折对比关系:However, On the contrary, but, Although + clause(从句), In spite of + n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…
4.表因果关系:Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result
5表换一种方式表达:In other words, that is to say,
6.表进行举例说明:For example; For instance; such as + n/doing
7.表陈述事实:In fact, frankly speaking
8.表选择:either…or…,or
连句成文,注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡,书写一定要规范清晰。
第五步:润色修改