Question

12．Long ago God had a great many burdens which he wished to have carried from one place to another on the earth，so he asked the animals to lend a hand．But all of them began to make excuses for not helping：the elephant was too dignified； the lion，too proud； and so on．Finally the birds came to God and said，"If you will tie the burdens into small bundles，we'll be glad to carry them for you．We are small but we would like to help．"So God fastened upon the back of each one a small bundle，and they all set out walking across the plain to their destination．They sang as they went，and did not seem to feel the weight of their burdens at all．Every day the burdens seemed lighter and lighter until the loads seems to be lifting the birds，instead of the birds carrying the burdens．When they arrived at their destination，they discovered that when they removed their loads，there were wings in their place．It was the wings that enabled them to fly to the sky．
【写作内容】
1．以约30词左右概括短文的主要内容；
2．然后以约120词就"Burdens Give Us Wings"这个主题写一篇短文，包括如下要点：
（1）你在生活中或学习上有什么负担？你怎样看待它们？
（2）你认为怎样做可以将负担变成翅膀．
【写作要求】
1．作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子．
2．作文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称．
【评分标准】
概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯．
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Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇读写任务作文，根据所提供的材料信息，以"Burdens Give Us Wings"为主题，写一篇短文．写作时，应以第一人称为主，时态为一般现在时，写作要点：1．概括所给短文主要内容；2．写出自己在生活，学习上的负担；3．对负担的看法；3．怎样做可以将负担变为翅膀．
重点短语：
volunteer to （志愿做…） be burdened with（有…负担） from my own perspective（依我看） as long as  （只有） in a word（总之）
高分句型：
1．Unexpectedly，wings replaced the loads afterwards，which enabled the birds to fly．该句灵活运用高级词汇及非限制性定语从句．
2．But as I always focus on the sunny side of life，I see these inevitable burdens as opportunities to learn more knowledge，gain more experience and thus grow more and more mature．该句灵活运用高级词汇及短语，属于复杂长句．
3．For another，once we decide on a worthwhile goal，we should keep the faith that as long as we shoulder any loads with a light heart，we will make it eventually．

解答 Burdens Give Us Wings
The legend states that unlike other animals，the birds volunteered to help God carry the burdens to the destination merrily．Unexpectedly，wings replaced the loads afterwards，which enabled the birds to fly．（高分句型1）（介绍短文主要内容）
It's true that everyone，willingly or unwillingly，carries burdens of this or that kind，and I am no exception．I am burdened with endless homework，unsatisfactory performance，and sometimes disagreements with my family．But as I always focus on the sunny side of life，I see these inevitable burdens as opportunities to learn more knowledge，gain more experience and thus grow more and more mature．（高分句型2）（自己的负担和看法）
From my own perspective，taking advantage of the burdens properly，we can turn them into wings that help us fly closer and closer to our goals．For one thing，we should treat various burdens differently，only taking seriously those worth struggling for and letting go of the unimportant and unnecessary．For another，once we decide on a worthwhile goal，we should keep the faith that as long as we shoulder any loads with a light heart，we will make it eventually．（高分句型3）（如何将负担变为翅膀）
In a word，burdens can give us wings if we treat them properly．（总结）

点评 读写任务作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所给要点，写作时注意正确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词，句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．