Question

你的朋友Susan转学了但是到了新的环境遇到了一些交友的困难。作为朋友,你很想给她点建议。于是你写了一封信,鼓励她努力适应新的环境。要点如下:
①要自信…...
②与人微笑......
③一起参加活动......
④与人分享你的兴趣爱好......
注意:
①词数100左右；
 ②可适当增加细节。　　
 ③已给出信的开头和结尾，不计入词的总数。      
Dear Susan,
I ’m sorry to hear that                                                      
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Answer 1

Dear Susan,
  I ’m sorry to hear that you are not getting along well with the students in the new school. So I’d like to give you some tips.（2’）
  First, be as confident as you can. There’s nothing that attracts people more than someone who has a fairly positive attitude towards life. (5’)Next in order ， make eye contact with others, smile at them when they look at you, and laugh when they say something that’s funny. It makes you seem friendly.(5’) Third, invite others to do things together. For example, you can ask them to share a table at lunch. (5’)It’s better to develop and share your interest and hobbies with them. You will make good friends who have something in common with you.(5’)
  Last but not least, don’t be too hard on yourself. Making new friends takes a lot of time and effort. You should be patient. Best wishes and good luck!(2’)
Yours,
Lily

试题分析：这是一篇提纲作文，需要写的内容已经给出，但是写作时不要仅仅对要点进行生硬的翻译，而是要添加些内容，使文章看起来更充实，要组成一篇通顺连贯的短文，一定要谈谈自己的看法。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括，缺一不可。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，不能出现文章脱节问题。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。同时注意要求的字数，不要太多也不要太少。
点评：本文属于提纲作文，动笔前，一定要认真分析要点，理解要点要表达的含义，不能遗漏要点，跑题偏题。平时除了加强词汇积累，写作联系以外，还可以适当记忆一些类似的范文，这样在考试中可以起到事半功倍的效果。