Question

13．阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文．
     In junior high school，one of my classmates，Ethan，was addicted to TV．This boy simply knew everything about such pop shows as Who's the Boss？
     Then one day Ethan's mother made brim an offer in order to draw him back to his school subjects．She promised that she would give him 200ifhecouldgoafullmonthwithoutwatchinganyTV．NoneofusthoughtEthancoulddoit，buthedidquitewell．Hismompaidhim200．He went out and bought a TV，the biggest he could find．
      In recent years，hundreds of schools have carried out experiments with paying kids with each for showing up or getting good grades．All school kids admire this trend．But it upsets adults．Teachers say that we are rewarding kids for doing what they should be doing of their own will．Psychologists warn that money can actually make kids perform worse by making the act of learning cheap．The debate has become a typical battle over why our kids are not learning at the rate they should he despite decades of reforms and budget increases．
[写作内容]
1以约30词概括上文的主要内容．
2以约120词对用金钱鼓励孩子学习的现象进行议论，内容包括：
（1）你对用金钱鼓励孩子学习的看法：
（2）你的父母（或其他亲人）是如何鼓励你学习的；
（3）你认为怎样才能更好地鼓励孩子学习．
[写作要求]
1作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事．也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子．
2作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称．
[评分标准]
概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯．

Answer 1

分析 本文是读写任务型写作，这类作文可按照三段式模板写：第一段：概况所给短文要点．第二段：过渡词引出主题句---阐述理由或影响．第三段：个人观点．特别要注意第一段的概括．用自己的语言概括，不能照搬照抄原文．时态一般以一般现在时为主．人称以第三称为主．重要短语：show up （炫耀），in order to（为了），encourage sb to do…．（鼓励某人做某事），on the contrary （相反），make progress（进步），be confronted with（遇到），make up my mind （下定决心），live up to…（不辜负…）．

解答 The passage mainly tells us that parents give money to their children so that they can show up or get good grades recently by the way of taking the example of Ethan and his mother．（概括）
Some schools，teachers and parents give their students or kids money as a stimulating means in order to encourage them to do what they should do effectively．【高分句型】This phenomenon is common in recent years and it is welcomed by most of the young．I don't think it is an effective way．，on the contrary it may lead to the opposite result．（对用金钱鼓励孩子学习的看法）
My parents and family often tell me some encouraging stories in ancient or modern times such as Li Bai，ZhouEnlai and so on．Each time I make a little progress in my study，they always praise me with open arms，and whenever I am confronted with difficulties，my family always stand my side．【高分句型】I feel comfortable and warm in my heart for what they do for me．I make up my mind that I will live up to my family and my homeland．（父母如何鼓励你学习）
I think，as a student myself，school and parents should educate their kids through teaching them to study for their family and their motherland rather than giving them money to let them passively do something．Only by building up some noble and long-range arms can they study on their own initiative．【高分句型】（自己观点）

点评 读写任务型写作是将阅读与写作有机结合，要求考生既能读懂文章信息，又要依据要求规范连贯地表达内容，其中准确概括很有挑战且十分重要，根据记叙文、议论文、说明文等不同文体作相应概括，总的来说，遵循以下步骤：确定主题句；寻找关键词；重构主题句；重组支持句．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．