Question

假如你是李华，你的笔友Mike 从媒体上得知前段时间全国多地包括宁波等地出现雾霾，非常担心，写E-mail询问有关情况，请你回复。回复应包括以下要点：1/实况描述 2.影响和成因 3.生活启示

注意：1.词数：100-120词。 E-mail的开头与结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

2.生词：雾霾 haze

Dear Mike,

Thank you very much for your concern.

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Mike,

Thank you very much for your concern. Recently many places in China including Ningbo were blanketed with thick yellow haze. Everything around disappeared from our sight. Some highways were closed. Traffic jams were commonly seen in the streets. Many people, especially children and seniors, even found it difficult to breathe. As a result, local hospitals were crowded with people who had problems with their noses and lungs. Part of the cause was the dry weather, but the severely damaged environment contributed a lot to this nightmare.

To make a significant change, we really have to do more to protect our environment. To live a better life, we have to push on with the economy, but it would be meaningless if we had to achieve it at the cost of our breathing air.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】这是一篇电子邮件写作。主要是向麦克介绍雾霾的相关情况及相应的生活启示，考生在介绍雾霾时要尽量结合自己所知道的情况，对于相关不知道的情况不要涉及。

本文第二句Recently many places in China including Ningbo were blanketed with thick yellow haze.把including Ningbo当做插入语，使得句子十分简练；本文三四五句Everything around disappeared from our sight. Some highways were closed. Traffic jams were commonly seen in the streets.，三个较短的动作性句子并列，虽然没有用连接词 ，但读来朗朗上口，很有节奏感； 本文第七句local hospitals were crowded with people who had problems with their noses and lungs使用了who领导的宾语从句；第二段To make a significant change, we really have to do more to protect our environment. To live a better life, we have to push on with the economy，两个to+动词原形的句子相并列，表示为了….增加了句势；结尾but it would be meaningless if we had to achieve it at the cost of our breathing air.又使用了if领导的条件状语从句。本文短语使用也十分好，使用了be blanketed with掩盖…，As a result结果，be crowded with挤满了，contribute to有助于…等很多短语，在词语运用上也很形象，比如第一段最后一句damaged environment contributed a lot to this nightmare.用nightmare来形容这场雾霾。十分恰当形象。本文从句虽然运用不多，但是词语运用很恰当，使用了并列性的动作性句子更增添文章的节奏感。总结：写作时从句的运用需注意，并不是从句越多越好，有时用几个并列句，更能增添文章的气势。

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