Question

【题目】假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。你的英国笔友Jim作为交换生目前正在上海学习。在给你的邮件中曾提到他对中国特色服饰文化很感兴趣。你得知今年十月将在北京举办 “中国服装艺术，创意设计”文化周活动，请你给他写封邮件，内容包括：

1. 时间、地点、参加人员；

2. 主要活动安排；

3. 询问对方的意向。

注意：1. 词数不少于50；

2. 开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

Dear Jim,

___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Jim,

How have you been recently? In your last letter, you expressed great interest in Chinese clothing culture. Here is some good news for you!

A culture week themed “Chinese Clothing Art and Creative Design” is to be held in Beijing this October. The participants are mainly costume culture lovers and designers. There will be Chinese clothes featuring different historical periods on display, like the well-known Chinese costumes in the Tang Dynasty. The costume show will surely be a feast for your eyes. What’s more, you’ll have the hands-on opportunity to make your own innovative clothes design.

Do you feel interested in the activity? Will you come to Beijing for the culture week this October? Looking forward to hearing from you soon!

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求写一封邮件。

第一步：

审题：邮件 询问Jim是否有意参加“中国服装艺术，创意设计”文化周活动

人称：第三人称

时态：一般将来时

结构：总分法，分三部分，第一部分说明写信的目的，第二部分介绍文化周的具体情况，第三部分询问对方的意向。

要点：

1. 说明写信的目的：告诉Jim关于文化周的消息

2．介绍文化周的具体情况

①时间、地点、参加人员：今年10月，在北京，中国服饰文化爱好者和设计者

②主要活动安排：中国服饰展，参加亲自动手的体验活动

3．询问对方是否参加

第二步：列提纲（重点词汇、短语）

express interest in；a culture week；theme；participant；costume culture lovers and designers；feature；a feast for one’s eyes；have the hands-on opportunity to do…；hear from

第三步：连词成句

(1)You expressed great interest in Chinese clothing culture.

(2) A culture week is themed “Chinese Clothing Art and Creative Design”.

（3）The culture week is to be held in Beijing this October.

(4) The participants are mainly costume culture lovers and designers.

(5) There will be Chinese clothes on display.

(6) Chinese clothes feature different historical periods.

(7) The costume show will surely be a feast for your eyes.

(8) You’ll have the hands-on opportunity to make your own innovative clothes design.

(9) Do you feel interested in the activity?

(10) Will you come to Beijing for the culture week this October?

根据提示和关键词进行遣词造句,适当地运用句型，注意时态和主谓一致问题。

第四步：连句成篇(衔接词、亮点词汇)

第2个句子做定语从句或过去分词作定语，连接下面的两个句子

（2）A culture week is to be held in Beijing this October.

(3) The culture week is themed “Chinese Clothing Art and Creative Design”.

→A culture week (which is) themed “Chinese Clothing Art and Creative Design” is to be held in Beijing this October.

用表示递进关系的过渡词连接下面的两个句子

(7) The costume show will surely be a feast for your eyes.

(8) You’ll have the hands-on opportunity to make your own innovative clothes design.

→ The costume show will surely be a feast for your eyes. What’s more, you’ll have the hands-on opportunity to make your own innovative clothes design.

→ The costume show will surely be a feast for your eyes. Besides , you’ll have the hands-on opportunity to make your own innovative clothes design.

→ The costume show will surely be a feast for your eyes. In addition, you’ll have the hands-on opportunity to make your own innovative clothes design.

适当地运用高级词汇、复杂句式提升文章的档次，增加文章的可读性。