Question

【题目】假定你是李华, 你的澳大利亚朋友Peter给你发了一封e-mail, 告诉你他将于春节期间到你所在的城市北京来旅游，请你给他回一封e-mail欢迎他来北京，并表示愿意提供帮助，同时提醒他注意事项如天气等。

注意：1. 短文必须包括提示中的全部内容，可适当增加细节以使行文连贯。

2. 开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

3. 100词左右。

Dear Peter,

How are you these days?

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Best wishes

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Peter,

How are you these days? I’m happy to receive you e-mail, saying you’re coming to Beijing during the Spring Festival.

I’m on holiday then. Therefore, I’d like to be your guide and show you around some of the most popular places of interest if you like. By the way, my family invite you to celebrate this most important Chinese festival at my home. Then you can learn something more about our culture.

As you know, unlike in your hometown, it can be very cold then in Beijing. So you’d better take more clothes with you to protect you from catching a cold.

I’m expecting your coming and can hardly wait to see you. I’m sure we’ll have a good time.

Best wishes!

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】这是一篇提纲类作文。题中已经给出了相关的信息和要求，写作时要注意必须包括提示中的全部内容，不要遗漏要点，可适当增加细节以使行文连贯。注意文章的时态，因为是对将来的打算，所以可采用一般将来时。写作时尤其注意主谓和时态的正确。可适当使用一些连词来增加文章的逻辑性，使文章更通顺流畅。

【亮点分析】这篇短文结构完整，要点齐全，表达准确流畅。文章使用了很多实用的表达方式，例如:文章使用了一些连接词和插入语，如therefore，by the way, then, so等等，使文章的结构非常清楚紧凑，逻辑性强。另外，句式多变，简单句、复合句长短呼应，一些复杂句式的运用，如I’d like to …, As you know, unlike in your hometown…, I’m expecting your coming…等，增强了文章的可读性。