题目内容
写一篇议论文,简述乘飞机和乘火车旅行的利弊。词数:150左右。
解析:
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Air Travel and Train Travel Air travel has two advantages.First,it can save a lot of time.For example,we can fly from Shenyang to Beijing with①less than an hour,but by train,we have to spend about ten hours to travel②.Secondly,air travel is more comfortable,because the plane flies so smooth③that we can rest well during the trip,when④the train is sometimes crowded and passengers have to sit for a long time,which makes them tired. However,train travel also has its own advantages For example,traveling by train from Shenyang to Beijing cost⑤less than 2000 yuan,when⑥traveling by plane will cost about 700 yuan.Besides,outside the train's windows,we can enjoy natural scenery. Of course,different people have different view⑦on traveling,but in my opinion,I prefer to travel by train. 修改:①with→in 介词in表示时间,指“在某段时间内”。 ②to travel→traveling 本句使用的是“spend time(in)doing”句型,traveling前省略了in。 ③smooth→smoothly 此处应使用副词作状语,修饰动词flies。 ④when→while 连词while用以表示对比或相反的情况。 ⑤cost→costs 根据上下文,此处应该用动词的一般现在时态;动名词短语作主语时,谓语动词用单数。 ⑥when→while 同④。 ⑦view→views 此处应该用名词的复数形式。 评点:习作者用充分有力的事实论证了乘飞机和乘火车旅行的利弊,并清楚地表明了自己的观点。短文条理清晰,语义表达清楚,是一篇优秀的作文。 |