Question

【题目】如今，我们身边不乏“低头族”。他们在与朋友聚会、家人团聚或乘坐交通工具时，常常低头忙于浏览手机。请简要描述此现象，并发表你的看法。

注意：1. 词数100左右；

2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

提示词：低头族 phubbing

The phenomenon that people are always phubbing is becoming more and more popular.

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Answer 1

【答案】The phenomenon that people are always phubbing is becoming more and more popular. Some people only stare at the screens of their phones, ignoring the people around them no matter when they take a bus, hold a party or even get together with their families. Worse still, they will not miss the chance of surfing the Internet or playing the games when they cross the road, which is likely to cause serious accidents and threaten their lives.

It is high time that we threw away the phone and raised our heads up. Do cherish the ones around us and appreciate the splendid scenery ahead of us.

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于话题类。

第1步：根据提示可知，本篇为话题类作文。如今，我们身边不乏“低头族”。他们在与朋友聚会、家人团聚或乘坐交通工具时，常常低头忙于浏览手机。请简要描述此现象，并发表你的看法。时态应为一般现在时。

第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如：stare at凝视，take a bus乘公车， hold a party举行宴会，worse still更糟糕的是，threaten威胁，throw away扔掉，cherish珍惜。

第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。

亮点说明：作者在范文中使用了较多高级表达方式，如：Worse still, they will not miss the chance of surfing the Internet or playing the games when they cross the road, which is likely to cause serious accidents and threaten their lives.定语从句的运用；It is high time that we threw away the phone and raised our heads up.常用句型的运用。本文内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。另外全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。