Question

【题目】假定你是李华，近日目睹了一次严重的交通事故：一名小男孩因闯红灯被车撞伤。此事引发了你对交通安全的思考。请根据以下要点给校英语报社投稿。

1.存在的问题；

2.造成的后果；

3.提出建议。

注意：1.词数100左右；

2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

3.开头和结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数。

Dear editor,

I'm Li Hua,a senior school student.I want to say something about the traffic problems.__________________

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear editor,

I’m Li Hua,a senior school student.I want to say something about the traffic problems.Recently,I witnessed that a boy ran the red light and was injured by a speedy car.What a pity!

I noticed that more and more traffic accidents happened on the road,most of which resulted from people's breaking the traffic rules,such as disobeying traffic signals and moving on regardless of speed limits.When accidents

happen,what we lose is not only time and money but health or even our lives.The problem of traffic safety is an urgent one because it concerns the safety of all of us.

So the government should carry out effective management of the traffic systems and everyone should raise the awareness of traffic safety and strictly obey the traffic rules.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】书面表达的解题思路：

1.确定文章的体裁，本题所要求写的书面表达是书信格式，那么首先就需要知晓书信的写作特点。

2.确定文章时态的基调，确定文章时态的基调对于整个写作非常重要。它直接决定了不同句子使用的时态正确与否。

3. 给文章划分基本段落，仔细阅读题目要求和文字提示，领会要写的文章的主题，确定文章的段落，写出各段的主题句。本题中的内容要点有：1.介绍目睹的事情；2.反映存在的问题及造成的后果；3.提出建议。这样确定文章的基本段落分为三段。

4.尝试用高级词汇，使可读性增强。美化句子可以采用复合句和特殊的句型结构，也可以采用形式主语、形式宾语或简略句来实现。

5.连句成篇，在连句成篇的过程中需要注意过渡句和连接词的使用。

【范文亮点】

I noticed that more and more traffic accidents happened on the road, most of which resulted from people's breaking the traffic rules, such as disobeying traffic signals and moving on regardless of speed limits.

句意：我注意到在路上发生了越来越多的交通事故，其中大部分都是由于人们违反交通规则，比如不遵守交通信号，不顾速度限制而行驶。

句中“most of which resulted from people's breaking the traffic rules, such as disobeying traffic signals and moving on regardless of speed limits.”是非限制性定语从句，which代指traffic accidents，在从句中做主语，从句中such as对交通事故进行举例说明。