题目内容
【题目】假定你是李华,是一名高一的学生,自从进入高中学习以来你妈妈不允许你上网,她认为上网不仅浪费时间还耽误学习。你不同意她的看法,为此你感到很苦恼。请你用英语写一封信向校英语报的编辑王老师求助。
注意:1.文中不得出现真实的人名或地名;
2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
3.词数100左右。书信开头和结尾已经给出,不计入总词数。
Dear Mr. Wang,
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Yours sincerely
Li Hua
【答案】Dear Mr. Wang,
①I’m Li Hua, a Senior I student in our school, I’m sorry to disturb you, but I have to write to ask you for help, hoping you will be so kind to help me.
②Ever since I came into Senior high, my mother hasn’t allowed me to surf the Internet. In her opinion, it is a waste of time to surf the Internet and it also affects my study. ③However, I don’t agree with her, the Internet makes it convenient for me to easily find the information I need; ④besides, if I meet with problems in my study I can solve them through the Internet, which helps me a lot. ⑤Also I can share something that worries me with my friends, which reduces my stress. ⑥Faced with my mother’s strong attitude. What should I do? I really need your help!
⑦I would appreciate it if you could give me some advice on it. I’m looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【解析】试题分析:这是一篇提纲类作文,动笔前,一定要认真分析要点,理解要点要表达的含义,不能遗漏要点,跑题偏题。平时除了加强词汇积累,写作联系以外,还可以适当记忆一些类似的范文,这样在考试中可以起到事半功倍的效果。我们需要用正确的英语把给出的要点表达出来。写作时注意准确运用时态,上下文意思连贯,符合逻辑关系,尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式,同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。特别注意在选择句式时要赋予变化。
【亮点点评】
本文是一篇求助信,语气委婉诚恳,表达简单明了。作者清楚地表达了自己的想法并提出了要求。在语言的使用上,使用了一些灵活的句式。①使用了现在分词作状语;②句使用了时间状语从句;③句转折连词的使用语气贴切并使用了形式宾语it;④⑤句使用了状语从句和定语从句,不仅让行文有节奏感,也使得信息浓度高。⑦句句型would appreciate it if的使用语气委婉客气。